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The diagram below shows geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The diagram below shows geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
Imitating one another is an innate human tendency and this has played a vital role in human evolution. I strongly believe that the increasing tendency of copying other humans is beneficial since it increases the reach of the original work to hitherto unreachable places and reduces the price for those who can’t afford the original work. Though developing an original workforce is time-consuming and copying it violates certain rights of the creator, this helps the society as a whole. Copying enables people to create cheaper versions of the workforce and this increases its accessibility for everyone. For instance, Mona Lisa, which was painted by Leonardo da Vinci in the 16th century, has been copied by thousands of artists and this had enabled the common citizens to purchase an imitation of the masterpiece. Moreover, copying the formulations of medicines helps create cheaper versions of patented costly ones. Though this is a violation of patents and may lead to lawsuits at international courts, this has saved lives of millions of poor people who can’t afford the costly medicines. For example, the World Health Organisation has recently claimed in its report that copied versions of patented drugs for cancer have saved lives of more than a million people in India who could not afford the costly global ones. In conclusion, the increasing trend of copying has made the earth a better place live. Though it has violated the rights of a few rich global companies, it has brought happiness to the lives of millions of poor people. This tendency, however, needs to be monitored under strict regulation since excessive copying will prevent talented individuals from creating innovative products and this may slow down the march of human civilization.
Imitating one another is an innate
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human
tendency and this has played a vital role in
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human
evolution. I
strongly
believe that the increasing tendency of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copying
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
is beneficial since it increases the reach of the original work to hitherto unreachable places and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the price for those who can’t afford the original work.

Though developing an original workforce is time-consuming and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copying
it violates certain rights of the creator, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the society as a whole.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Copying
enables
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to create cheaper versions of the workforce and this increases its accessibility for everyone.
For instance
, Mona Lisa, which
was painted
by Leonardo da Vinci in the 16th century, has
been copied
by thousands of artists and this had enabled the common citizens to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
an imitation of the masterpiece.

Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copying
the formulations of medicines
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
create cheaper versions of patented costly ones. Though this is a violation of patents and may lead to lawsuits at international courts, this has saved
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
of millions of poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who can’t afford the costly medicines.
For example
, the World Health
Possible spelling mistake. 'Organisation' is British English.
Organisation
has recently claimed in its report that copied versions of patented drugs for cancer have saved
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
of more than a million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in India who could not afford the costly global ones.

In conclusion
, the increasing trend of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copying
has made the earth a better place
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live
. Though it has violated the rights of a few rich global
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, it has brought happiness to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
of millions of poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. This tendency,
however
, needs to
be monitored
under strict regulation since excessive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copying
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
talented individuals from creating innovative products and this may slow down the march of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
civilization.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The diagram below shows geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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