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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
Traffic congestion has become one of the most severe problems in cities around the world. Some people believe that, the only approach to minimize the traffic is to decrease the necessity for individuals travelling to work, university or shop from home. However, I will support this view with arguments in the following paragraph. It is often said that, the ever-increasing number of vehicles on the roads may cause acute traffic calamities and pollution. This is evident in the rush hour we experience huge congestion every morning and evening since many people go to their destinations using transports. As we know, people can work from home; even they can do anything, such as study and shopping using the internet. For instance, when technology has developed the majority of people can do online work, distance learning and shopping facilities are available online. This certainly helps us to reduce traffic problems on roads, which could diminish pollution, accident, and also save our travel time. As there have many other solutions, namely, evacuate citizens to different regions and infrastructural development of roads, but these solutions have many limitations. So I think, the above solution would be a viable one for this problem. Nevertheless, even if everyone had access to the technology and the opportunity to work from home, it is unrealistic to think that everyone would want. Even though the technology for working, studying or shopping online makes this option a possibility, on the one hand, it would mean people had less freedom of choice and less social contact in their lives. This would have an astronomical impact on society. In conclusion, although, the majority of people have benefited from working, studying or shopping from home so that people should support the idea to do things from home using the internet which not only reduces choking traffic but also develop people’s way of living.
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congestion has become one of the most severe problems in cities around the world.
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people
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approach to minimize the
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traffic
is to decrease the necessity for individuals travelling to
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work
, university or shop from home.
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often
said that, the ever-increasing number of vehicles on the roads may cause acute
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traffic
calamities and pollution. This is evident in the rush hour we experience huge congestion every morning and evening since
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many
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people
go to their destinations using transports. As we know,
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people
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work
from home; even they can do anything, such as study and
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shopping
using the internet.
For instance
, when technology has developed the majority of
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people
can do online
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work
, distance learning and
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shopping
facilities are available online. This
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helps
us to
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traffic
problems on roads, which could diminish pollution, accident, and
also
save our travel time. As there have
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many
other solutions,
namely
, evacuate citizens to
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different
regions and infrastructural development of roads,
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these solutions have
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many
limitations.
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, the above solution would be a viable one for this problem.

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work
from home, it is unrealistic to
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think
that everyone would want.
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the technology for working, studying or
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shopping
online
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makes
this option a possibility, on the one hand, it would mean
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people
had less freedom of choice and less social contact in their
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lives
. This would have an astronomical impact on society.

In conclusion
, although, the majority of
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people
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shopping
from home
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so
that
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people
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idea
to do things from home using the internet which not
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people’s
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IELTS essay The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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