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The chart shows the amount of waste production by British households since 1990 with predictions until 2030. v.1

The chart shows the amount of waste production by British households since 1990 with predictions until 2030. v. 1
More and more multinational companies are setting up their branches / offices in developing countries. The primary advantage of having large scale industries is that they will increase employment and reduce poverty, but the main drawback is that they force employees to work hard. Global organizations often bring employment to developing nations. Nowadays, every nation produces a lot of doctors, scientists and engineers, but fails to give them a deserving job. When multinational companies set up their offices in developing nations, talented and educated people get good jobs. For example, a study conducted by Times reported that Indian graduates from STEM do not like to leave their nation in search of better opportunities in foreign nations because they are able to find suitable jobs within the country. Moreover, big industries create jobs not only for skilled workers, but also for unskilled workers. China is another example. It is known as a manufacturing hub because companies like Apple and Google manufacture their products there. However, the major drawback of multinational company investment is that employees are forced to work harder and yet they are paid less than their counterparts in developed countries. Many times employees complain that their employers compel them to work overtime to meet their targets. For instance, Indian Multinational IT industries force their employees to work more than 8 hours to complete their tasks to hand over assignments to the clients located across the Atlantic. In conclusion, global companies in developing nations bring jobs for the skilled and unskilled labour and help individuals live the good life, but they also force them to change their lifestyle by asking them to work overtime.
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multinational
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companies
are setting up their branches / offices in
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developing
countries. The primary advantage of having large scale industries is that they will increase employment and
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reduce
poverty,
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but
the main drawback is that they force
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employees
to
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work
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hard
.

Global organizations
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often
bring employment to
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developing
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nations
. Nowadays, every
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nation
produces
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a lot of
doctors, scientists and engineers,
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but
fails to give them a deserving
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job
. When
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multinational
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companies
set up their offices in
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developing
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nations
, talented and educated
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people
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get
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good
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jobs
.
For example
, a study conducted by Times reported that Indian graduates from STEM do not like to
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leave
their
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nation
in search of better opportunities in foreign
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nations
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because
they are able to find suitable
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jobs
within the country.
Moreover
,
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big
industries create
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jobs
not
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only
for skilled workers,
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but
also
for unskilled workers.

China is another example. It
is known
as a manufacturing hub
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because
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companies
like Apple and Google manufacture their products there.
However
, the major drawback of
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multinational
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company
investment is that
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employees
are forced
to
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work
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harder and
yet
they
are paid
less than their counterparts in
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developed countries
.

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Many
times
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employees
complain that their employers compel them to
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work
overtime to
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meet
their targets.
For instance
, Indian
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Multinational
IT industries force their
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employees
to
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work
more than 8 hours to complete their tasks to hand over assignments to the clients located across the Atlantic.

In conclusion
, global
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companies
in
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developing
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nations
bring
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jobs
for the skilled and unskilled
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labour
and
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help
individuals
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live
the
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good
life,
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but
they
also
force them to
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change
their lifestyle by asking them to
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work
overtime.
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IELTS essay The chart shows the amount of waste production by British households since 1990 with predictions until 2030. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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