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the diagram below shows the information about the amount of money spend on alocol and drugs. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevant. v.1

the diagram below shows the information about the amount of money spend on alocol and drugs.
Nowadays, many people think that talent is a natural gift, when someone born, he/she comes with some phenomenal skills. Moreover, I tend to think that anyone can achieve in their life is because of hard work, dedication and proper guidance. One of the former Indian track and field sprinter whose name is “Milkha Singh” said that hard work, willpower and dedication to a person with these qualities, the sky is the limit. Firstly, it is believed that some people are really passionate about their work or hobbies. So it is beneficial to their family exerts effort to realize this. One of the main examples is the greatest cricketer “Sachin Tendulkar”. He played his first international match at the age of 16. He was not from cricketer background. In addition, one of the major examples is the legend “Mike Tyson”. He was a professional American boxer who won the world heavyweight championship at the age of 20. Furthermore, he holds the record yet. Apart from that, experts would argue that some people born with natural talent. They gain from their ancestors. Recently, I rod an article in a newspaper a 2 year old boy played various musical instruments. In an article the writer mentioned that his father was a professional musician. It is hard to believe that how 2 year boy has extraordinary talent. Therefore, it can be deducted that some people are more talented than others. To sum up, from my point of view any of the children achieve in life with proper guidance and encouragement. Having said that, it is also important for that child to dedicate whatever want to achieve in life.
Nowadays,
many
people
think
that talent is a natural gift, when someone born, he/she
comes
with
some
phenomenal
skills
.
Moreover
, I tend to
think
that anyone can achieve in their life is
because
of
hard
work, dedication and proper guidance. One of the former Indian
track
and field sprinter whose name is “
Milkha
Singh” said that
hard
work, willpower and dedication to a person with these qualities, the sky is the limit.

Firstly
, it
is believed
that
some
people
are
really
passionate about their work or hobbies.
So
it is beneficial to their family exerts effort to realize this. One of the main examples is the greatest cricketer “
Sachin
Tendulkar
”. He played his
first
international match at the age of 16. He was not from cricketer background.
In addition
, one of the major examples is the legend “Mike Tyson”. He was a professional American boxer who won the world heavyweight championship at the age of 20.
Furthermore
, he holds the record
yet
.

Apart from that, experts would argue that
some
people
born with natural talent. They gain from their ancestors. Recently,
I rod
an article in a newspaper a 2 year
old
boy played various musical instruments. In an article the writer mentioned that his father was a professional musician. It is
hard
to believe that how 2 year
boy
has extraordinary talent.
Therefore
, it can
be deducted
that
some
people
are more talented than others.

To sum up, from my point of view any of the children achieve in life with proper guidance and encouragement. Having said that, it is
also
important
for that child to dedicate whatever want to achieve in life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay the diagram below shows the information about the amount of money spend on alocol and drugs.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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