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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.14

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.
Internet, the genius creation of humans, benefits people with ample of ways. Everything, from education to entertainment, is easily accessible on the internet. The distance learning is now possible for the students who somehow couldn't get enrolled in the desired universities, and that is only due to the network. No doubt online education has taken over the libraries, still these reference centres play the crucial role in acknowledgement. Therefore, I disagree with the statement that the bookstores are not requisite. To begin with, the book archives have a paramount place in the educational curriculum due to several reasons. Firstly, the ambience of the libraries can never match to that of the online class. Even though learning through the net is beneficial as it allows the students to study from their homes, but the aura of reading can never take over to that of the storehouse of books. There will always be disturbances, hustle and bustle, and laziness to read at homes, however, the situation is totally opposite in reading rooms. Secondly, the vast range of books, magazines, and other reading materials provided in the treasures might not be available online. Many ancient authors have published their manuals that are authorized to only a few of the book houses. For example, the primordial manuscripts are not available online clearly. Moreover, reading books online is the cumbersome task because to examine the particular edition the person has to surf the web which could be hazardous to brain as well as eyes. In the end, despite internet provide us with many advantages, it will not risk the libraries. Hence, it is undeniable that libraries are not a prerequisite.
Internet, the genius creation of humans, benefits
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people
with ample of ways. Everything, from education to entertainment, is
easily
accessible on the internet. The distance learning is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
possible for the students who somehow couldn't
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get
enrolled in the desired universities, and
that is
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only
due to the network. No doubt
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online
education has taken over the libraries,
still
these reference
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centres
play the crucial role in
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acknowledgement
.
Therefore
, I disagree with the statement that the bookstores are not requisite.

To
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begin
with, the
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book
archives have a paramount place in the educational curriculum due to several reasons.
Firstly
, the ambience of the libraries can never match to that of the
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online
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class
.
Even though
learning through the net is beneficial as it
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allows
the students to study from their homes,
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but
the aura of
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reading
can never take over to that of the storehouse of
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books
. There will always be disturbances, hustle and bustle, and laziness to read at homes,
however
, the situation is
totally
opposite in
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reading
rooms.

Secondly
, the vast range of
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books
, magazines, and other
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reading
materials provided in the treasures might not be available
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
.
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Many
ancient authors have published their manuals that
are authorized
to
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only
a few of the
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book
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houses
.
For example
, the primordial manuscripts are not available
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online
clearly
.
Moreover
,
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reading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
is the cumbersome task
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because
to examine the particular edition the person
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has to
surf the web which could be hazardous to brain
as well
as eyes.

In the
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end
, despite internet provide us with
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many
advantages, it will not
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risk
the libraries.
Hence
, it is undeniable that libraries are not a prerequisite.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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