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The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

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The bar chart below depicts the percentile of the Canadian workforce in Manufacturing, Services, Agriculture/fishing, Construction and Energy/ Water Industries during the year 1850 and 2020. Overall, it can be seen that service and construction industry inclined during the decades where as all the industries where declined in the years while Energy/ water in all the years were the least in percentage. In 1850, Manufacturing was the highest among the Canadian workforce which accumulates 36% but there was an sudden dropped in 2020 which was only left with 9%. Moreover, Agriculture/fishing and Energy/ water was only left with 1% in 2020 becoming the least favorite work regarding all the other works as compared to 1880 where it was 22% and 3% respectively. Furthermore, In service area, in 1880 the workforce was 33% which highly rosed up to 81%in 2020 becoming the highest as compared to all the works where as the work capital in agriculture area was 5% in 1880 which increased to only 8% in 2020.
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