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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station
The pursuit of knowledge is a concept that is valued by most cultures. In the 21st century, we now have many more options regarding how and where to find that knowledge. If you are a French national, you can apply to do an economics degree in the USA, and likewise an American citizen can take a course in linguistics in France. Indeed, most universities across the world now have a good proportion of foreign students enrolled in their programs. Certainly, there are numerous advantages of studying in a different country. Many students choose to do this because they know that a particular university, for instance, HavardBusiness School, has an excellent reputation. Graduating from here, they believe, will increase their chances of securing a decent position in a company back home. Students studying abroad also have the opportunity to form friendships with people of various nationalities: in time, these may develop into useful professional networks. Furthermore, living far from family and friends can enable young people to become more independent and self-sufficient. Unfortunately, the experience of studying abroad is not always a positive one. Research suggests that a small percentage of young people struggle to adapt to their new environment and suffer from severe culture shock. The situation can become worse if the student is not mature enough to cope by themselves. Different approaches to teaching and learning may also come as an unwelcome surprise to some students. In essence, the key to a good experience at a foreign university is an open mind. If a student is presented with this opportunity, they should certainly seize it.
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is valued
by most cultures. In the 21st century, we
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more options regarding how and where to find that knowledge. If you are a French national, you can apply to do an economics degree in the USA, and
likewise
an American citizen can take a course in linguistics in France.
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, most universities across the world
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enrolled in their programs.

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, there are numerous advantages of studying in a
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different
country.
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students
choose to do this
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HavardBusiness
School, has an excellent reputation. Graduating from here, they believe, will increase their chances of securing a decent position in a
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company
back home.
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Students
studying abroad
also
have the opportunity to form friendships with
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people
of various nationalities: in time, these may develop into useful professional networks.
Furthermore
, living far from family and friends can enable young
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people
to become more independent and self-sufficient.

Unfortunately, the experience of studying abroad is not always a
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positive
one. Research suggests that a
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small
percentage of young
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people
struggle to adapt to their new environment and suffer from severe culture shock. The situation can become worse if the
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student
is not mature
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enough
to cope by themselves.
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Different
approaches to teaching and learning may
also
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come
as an unwelcome surprise to
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some
students.

In essence, the key to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience at a foreign university is an open mind. If a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
is presented
with this opportunity, they should
certainly
seize it.
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To have another language is to possess a second soul.
Charlemagne

IELTS essay The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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