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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? in the future people will read fewer books than do today. v.35

in the future people will read fewer books than do today. v. 35
Our environment is negatively affected by the use of fossil fuels as a power source, which many people consume in various forms in their daily life such as petrol for cars and coal for generating electricity. While many people are not fully aware of the effect their actions have on the environment, they should be taught about how to make better decisions to save our planet. Firstly, people have not yet started modifying the way they live due to the lack of awareness about the issues they would face in the future. No one can deny that the consumption of excessive energy can harm our environment, but many people do not still understand the consequences of using this amount of energy on our planet’s future. That is to say, while many activists keep preaching about how everyone should decrease their energy consumption, people do not get enough knowledge about the alternatives from which they should consume energy. Secondly, it is the responsibility of our scientists and environmental activists to increase the awareness of the public. That is to say, people should get a sufficient amount of knowledge, which could be done by planning several campaigns to guide everyone to take positive actions towards our environment. In addition, people should not only be taught about the negative impact they have on the environment, but also they should be motivated to make better decisions by providing them with alternative green sources of energy. In conclusion, despite the efforts of scientists to discover the harmful effects of energy consumption on our planet, many people are still not aware of the consequences. These efforts should be spent wisely to increase the awareness and knowledge of the consumers about better options for satisfying their everyday energy needs.
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negatively
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use
of fossil fuels as a power source, which
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many
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people
consume in various forms in their daily life such as petrol for cars and coal for generating electricity. While
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many
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people
are not
fully
aware of the effect their actions have on the
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environment
, they should
be taught
about how to
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make
better decisions to save our planet.

Firstly
,
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people
have not
yet
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started
modifying the way they
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live
due to the lack of awareness about the issues they would face in the future. No one can deny that the consumption of excessive
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energy
can harm our
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environment
,
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but
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many
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people
do not
still
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energy
on our planet’s future.
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to say, while
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many
activists
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keep
preaching about how everyone should decrease their
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energy
consumption,
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people
do not
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enough
knowledge about the alternatives from which they should consume energy.

Secondly
, it is the responsibility of our scientists and environmental activists to increase the awareness of the public.
That is
to say,
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people
should
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get
a sufficient amount of knowledge, which could
be done
by planning several campaigns to guide everyone to take
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positive
actions towards our
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environment
.
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,
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people
should not
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only
be taught
about the
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negative
impact they have on the
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environment
,
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but
also
they should
be motivated
to
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make
better decisions by providing them with alternative green sources of energy.

In conclusion
, despite the efforts of scientists to discover the harmful effects of
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energy
consumption on our planet,
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many
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people
are
still
not aware of the consequences. These efforts should
be spent
wisely
to increase the awareness and knowledge of the consumers about better options for satisfying their everyday
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energy
needs.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay in the future people will read fewer books than do today. v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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