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Describe your favorite teacher. Explain how she\he inspired you? Give examples and details to supoort your answer. v.1

Describe your favorite teacher. Explain how she\he inspired you? Give examples and details to supoort your answer. v. 1
It is often believed that governments should conduct and supervise scientific studies instead of private companies. From my perspective, I completely agree with this statement because of the following reasons. Firstly, governments have sufficient resources in order to undertake those studies properly. In other words, scientific research usually requires cutting-edge facilities as well as advanced technologies that usually cost a considerable amount of money. However, the government budget could remain sustainable via their residents’ tax, allowing them to carry the research out effectively and productively. One illustration of this is nuclear energy research, which was undertaken by the US government years ago. Although the research was reported to use up to $300 million to build nuclear plants only, the scientists made a scientific breakthrough in terms of nuclear power, which led to the decrease in the use of fossil energy, and built a firm foundation of sustainable energy for the whole country. Secondly, corporations working on scientific research may be tempted to maximize profits. This can be explained by the fact that scientific studies usually have great financial potential, which makes some companies attempt to introduce their research to the public hurriedly without adequate trial tests. Regarding medical field, for instance, a new invention can usually give patients a sense of hope. As a result, in order to have effective treatments, they are willing to play no matter what it costs. Therefore, if the invention is done carelessly just to earn profits, not only could it waste patients’ money but it can also put their lives at risk. In conclusion, due to the quality of scientific research and ethical aspect when doing it, I agree strongly with the view that scientific research should be monitored and conducted by governments.
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companies
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Firstly
,
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governments
have sufficient resources in order to undertake those studies
properly
.
In other words
,
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scientific
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research
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usually
requires cutting-edge facilities
as well
as advanced technologies that
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usually
cost a considerable amount of money.
However
, the
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government
budget could remain sustainable via their residents’ tax, allowing them to carry the
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research
out
effectively
and
productively
. One illustration of this is nuclear energy
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research
, which was undertaken by the US
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government
years ago. Although the
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research
was reported
to
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use
up to $300 million to build nuclear plants
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only
, the scientists made a
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scientific
breakthrough in terms of nuclear power, which led to the decrease in the
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use
of fossil energy, and built a firm foundation of sustainable energy for the whole country.

Secondly
, corporations working on
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scientific
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research
may
be tempted
to maximize profits. This can be
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explained
by the fact that
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scientific
studies
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usually
have great financial potential, which
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makes
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some
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companies
attempt to introduce their
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research
to the public
hurriedly
without adequate trial
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tests
. Regarding medical field,
for instance
, a new invention can
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usually
give patients a sense of hope.
As a result
, in order to have effective treatments, they are willing to play no matter what it costs.
Therefore
, if the invention
is done
carelessly
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just
to earn profits, not
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only
could it waste patients’ money
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but
it can
also
put their
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lives
at
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risk
.

In conclusion
, due to the quality of
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scientific
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research
and ethical aspect when doing it, I
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agree
strongly
with the view that
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scientific
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research
should
be monitored
and conducted by
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governments
.
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IELTS essay Describe your favorite teacher. Explain how she\he inspired you? Give examples and details to supoort your answer. v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
289 words
7.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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