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The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and, make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works.
Although many governments and large companies have contributed in improving or making changes in our environment, but that does not mean individuals can do nothing about it. In other words, I disagree with the statements. The main reason why is that nowadays there are a lot of minor people who also contribute in improving by teaching the next generations, creating new things, reducing the usage of irrelevant things, and so on. There are several examples as of why I disagree. We all know that nowadays people are very addicted to their smart phones, gadgets, etc. , especially when it comes to social media. By having social media, people can share whatever they want to and view each other's post. Recently, the trend of posting story in Instagram is becoming bigger and bigger, especially when it is about our environment. To illustrate, there was an account who posted about fire in the Amazon, North America, the lungs of our world. Their intention as of why they shared is to make other people aware of the climate change. As a result, people become more aware of the situations. Another example is that there was a post about a turtle whose nose was full of trash. Not only the turtle but also other sea-animals that are living under the sea. As a result, many people start to reduce by using any kinds of plastic like plastic bag, straw, etc. Moreover, there are some people who create a re-useable stainless straw for them to drink. To conclude, even if it is just a small step, but individuals can do something to improve and make differences in our environment.
Although
many
governments
and large
companies
have contributed in improving or making
changes
in our environment,
but
that does not mean individuals can do nothing about it.
In other words
, I disagree with the statements. The main reason why is that nowadays there are
a lot of
minor
people
who
also
contribute in improving by teaching the
next
generations, creating new things, reducing the usage of irrelevant things, and
so
on. There are several examples as of why I disagree.

We all know that nowadays
people
are
very
addicted to their smart phones, gadgets, etc.
,
especially
when it
comes
to social media. By having social media,
people
can share whatever they want to and view each other's post. Recently, the trend of posting story in Instagram is becoming bigger and bigger,
especially
when it is about our environment. To illustrate, there was an account who posted about fire in the Amazon, North America, the lungs of our world. Their intention as of why they shared is to
make
other
people
aware of the climate
change
.
As a result
,
people
become more aware of the situations.

Another example is that there was a post about a turtle whose nose was full of trash. Not
only
the turtle
but
also
other sea-animals that are living under the sea.
As a result
,
many
people
start
to
reduce
by using any kinds of plastic like plastic bag, straw, etc.
Moreover
, there are
some
people
who create a re-useable stainless straw for them to drink.

To conclude
, even if it is
just
a
small
step,
but
individuals can do something to
improve
and
make
differences in our environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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