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The diagram below illustrates how glass is recycled
The healthcare sector is absolutely vital in every country and it is seen as a barometer of its development. Getting a proper medical facility is a necessity which no one should be deprived of. Free medical service should be available to all citizens, especially for those diseases which can prove to be life threatening. This service should not be limited based on cost parameters. In most of the developed countries in the world the cost incurred for the free treatment of its citizens is compensated through the tax payer's money. Tax brackets are quite high in these countries and thus people expect high quality and free medical services in return. Treatment of diseases such as cancer is extremely expensive and needs to be covered as most of the people won’t be able to afford it. For example, in Canada, tax deducted can be up to 40% of your salary, but all the latest treatments are available free of cost. It is the Government's responsibility to take care of the basic utilities like education, infrastructure and medical services. Though including the latest, high cost medical treatment can dent the allocated budget, it is necessary to include these treatments, without which the entire notion of a free health service fails. To overcome the cost challenges, the Government can make tax related changes by increasing the medical cess and allocating more funds towards the medical sector. Health insurance premiums can be increased, which will cover the additional cost. To conclude, the medical service should be free of cost, irrespective of the type of treatment because it is the tax payer's right to avail such a service and the Government need to take proper steps to earn the required revenue for doing so.
The healthcare sector is
absolutely
vital in every country and it is
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seen
as a barometer of its development. Getting a proper
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medical
facility is a necessity which no one should
be deprived
of.
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Free
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medical
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service
should be available to all citizens,
especially
for those diseases which can prove to be life threatening. This
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service
should not
be limited
based on
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cost
parameters.

In most of the
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developed countries
in the world the
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cost
incurred for the
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free
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treatment
of its citizens
is compensated
through the
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tax
payer's money.
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Tax
brackets are quite high in these countries and
thus
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people
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expect
high quality and
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free
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medical
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services
in return.
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Treatment
of diseases such as cancer is
extremely
expensive and needs to
be covered
as most of the
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people
won’t be able to afford it.
For example
, in Canada,
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tax
deducted can be up to 40% of your salary,
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but
all the latest
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treatments
are available
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free
of cost.

It is the
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Government
's responsibility to take care of the basic utilities like education, infrastructure and
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medical
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services
. Though including the latest, high
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cost
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medical
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treatment
can dent the allocated budget, it is necessary to include these
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treatments
, without which the entire notion of a
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free
health
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service
fails. To overcome the
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cost
challenges, the
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Government
can
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make
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tax
related
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changes
by increasing the
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medical
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cess
and allocating more funds towards the
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medical
sector. Health insurance premiums can
be increased
, which will cover the additional cost.

To conclude
, the
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medical
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service
should be
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free
of
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cost
, irrespective of the type of
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treatment
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because
it is the
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tax
payer's right to avail such a
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service
and the
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Government
need to take proper steps to earn the required revenue for doing
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so
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The diagram below illustrates how glass is recycled

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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