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The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree? ? ? v.1

The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. ? ? v. 1
New technologies have performed a true revolution in people’s lives in the past decades, and it is not different when it comes to education. While some people believe that, with growing use of computers in the learning process, teachers lost their importance in the classroom, I would argue that, not only nowadays, but also in the future, teachers will always play an essential role in children's education. Professors are considered the right guides to our pupils. While they teach educational content to children, they help with their personal development also. For instance, children do not learn only specific subjects when they are at school, learning how to interact with other people as well and teachers play an important role in this interaction. If these educators would not exist, our children did not have the thought to discern the right from the wrong. As a result, children would grow up without limits and ethics. Furthermore, some people do not succeed with the self-learning process. They need a person to show, at least, the basic topics and, from this point, they can proceed properly. To illustrate, there is a growing number of people who start an online course and never finish it, because they miss the engagement that teachers provide to students. To solve this problem, not only every school should have teachers following a number of students, but also online courses should have tutors available in case the student needed their help. Evidently, students would be more satisfied and the number of withdraws would fall substantially. In conclusion, despite the space that computers have occupied in our children’s education, teachers will have the special place to guide pupils, helping, consequently, in their development as ethical human beings.
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people’s
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lives
in the past decades, and it is not
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different
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comes
to education. While
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some
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people
believe that, with growing
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use
of computers in the learning process,
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teachers
lost their importance in the classroom, I would argue that, not
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only
nowadays,
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but
also
in the future,
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teachers
will always play an essential role in children's education.

Professors
are considered
the right guides to our pupils. While they teach educational content to
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children
, they
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help
with their personal development
also
.
For instance
,
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children
do not learn
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only
specific subjects when they are at school, learning how to interact with other
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people
as well
and
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teachers
play an
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important
role in this interaction. If these educators would not exist, our
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children
did not have the
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thought
to discern the right from the
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wrong
.
As a result
,
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children
would grow up without limits and ethics.

Furthermore
,
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some
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people
do not succeed with the self-learning process. They need a person to
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show
, at least, the basic topics and, from this point, they can proceed
properly
. To illustrate, there is a growing number of
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people
who
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start
an online course and never finish it,
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because
they miss the engagement that
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teachers
provide to
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students
. To solve this problem, not
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only
every school should have
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teachers
following a number of
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students
,
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but
also
online courses should have tutors available in case the
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student
needed their
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help
.
Evidently
,
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students
would be more satisfied and the number of withdraws would fall
substantially
.

In conclusion
, despite the space that computers have occupied in our
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children’s
education,
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teachers
will have the special place to guide pupils, helping,
consequently
, in their development as ethical human beings.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. ? ? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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