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Nowadays computers are widely used in education As a result some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Nowadays computers are widely used in education As a result some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms v. 1
Most schools and universities have already adopted computers in their teaching process. Many people assume that computers will replace teachers in the foreseeable future and teachers will no longer be necessary. I completely disagree with this view and believe that teachers will always be of great importance in the sphere of education. On the one hand, computers undeniably have a positive impact on the learning process. Firstly, they help facilitate the pace at which children assimilate the information. Even though graphics and visual demonstrations have already been introduced in classrooms, yet they are still in a small number and not be done on a frequent basis. Computers and projectors could address this problem, and serve a perfect demonstrator for what has just been learned in their lessons through lively images and videos. Secondly, enrichment evening classes are no longer needed, as learners who do not catch up in class could make use of online courses in a more flexible way than that of any other supplementary courses. However, computers cannot supplant teachers for many good reasons. Teachers do not only impart knowledge to their students, but they also serve as a role model and cultivate students’ potential. Impulsive and impressionable as they are, children are vulnerable to anti-social behavior and wrongdoings. Without sufficient disciplinary and guidance, they are likely to grow into violent and immoral adults. Moreover, students need a person to chart their learning progress and offer them valuable advice. Nevertheless, this cannot be done in a class that is completely dominated by computers and other such technological devices. Despite advancement in the algorithms that give computers the capacity to assessment, it is genuine advice from the people who students respect that makes a real difference in their learning progress. In conclusion, computers definitely have a beneficial impact on education. However, teachers are irreplaceable companions of students in their learning course.
Most schools and universities have already adopted computers in their teaching process.
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Many
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people
assume that computers will replace
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teachers
in the foreseeable future and
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teachers
will no longer be necessary. I completely disagree with this view and believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
will always be of great importance in the sphere of education.

On the one hand, computers
undeniably
have a
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positive
impact on the
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learning
process.
Firstly
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
facilitate the pace at which children assimilate the information.
Even though
graphics and visual demonstrations have already
been introduced
in classrooms,
yet
they are
still
in a
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small
number and not
be done
on a frequent basis. Computers and projectors could address this problem, and serve a perfect demonstrator for what has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
been learned
in their lessons through lively images and videos.
Secondly
, enrichment evening classes are no longer needed, as learners who do not catch up in
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class
could
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make
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use
of online courses in a more flexible way than that of any other supplementary courses.

However
, computers cannot supplant
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teachers
for
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many
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good
reasons.
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Teachers
do not
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only
impart knowledge to their
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students
,
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but
they
also
serve as a role model and cultivate
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students’
potential. Impulsive and impressionable as they are, children are vulnerable to anti-social behavior and wrongdoings. Without sufficient disciplinary and guidance, they are likely to grow into violent and immoral adults.
Moreover
,
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students
need a person to chart their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
progress and offer them valuable advice.
Nevertheless
, this cannot
be done
in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
that is
completely dominated by computers and other such technological devices. Despite advancement in the algorithms that give computers the capacity to assessment, it is genuine advice from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
respect that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
a real difference in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
progress.

In conclusion
, computers definitely have a beneficial impact on education.
However
,
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teachers
are irreplaceable companions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
course.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays computers are widely used in education As a result some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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