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Nowadays computers are widely used in education. As a result, some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Nowadays computers are widely used in education. As a result, some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms. v. 1
People ask what a relationship between their conduct and their clothes. It is apparent that the people feel more comfortable and happier when they wear fashionable clothes. This feeling relates to several reasons. Firstly, it can be deniable good address plays a partly role in an increase the self-confidence for several reasons. Firstly, it is important for people to get positive feedback from others. This reason explains that why people tend to wear beautiful clothes if they have an important meeting. For example, if a person wore fashionable a wristwatch, then he heard a nice comment, he would feel more confident and appreciation. Moreover, it is contended that clean clothes increase the self-stem for logical reasons. Firstly, it says needlessly that people try avoiding any negative comments because it leads them to feel unhappy. For instance, if there were spots on your clothes, you would think that you will receive bad comments. This feeling aggravates your mental health condition. Last but not least, the first sight will be the last vision. In other words, your clothes will affect on others’ vision about you. For example, if you had a bad word in your shirt, it would participate to build a bad image about you. However, some employers condemn some type of inappropriate clothes. In conclusion, the people tend to have fashionable clothes because these clothes lead them to mediate their emotional health. For this previous reason, I adamantly support this vision, saying wearing a good thing will modify your behaviour.
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ask what a relationship between their conduct and their
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clothes
. It is apparent that the
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people
feel more comfortable and happier when they wear fashionable
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clothes
. This feeling relates to several reasons.

Firstly
, it can be deniable
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good
address plays a
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partly role
in an increase the self-confidence for several
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.
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, it is
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important
for
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people
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positive
feedback from others. This
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reason
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explains
that why
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people
tend to wear
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beautiful
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clothes
if they have an
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important
meeting.
For example
, if a person wore fashionable a wristwatch, then he heard a nice comment, he would feel more confident and appreciation.

Moreover
, it
is contended
that clean
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clothes
increase the self-stem for logical
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reasons
.
Firstly
, it says
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people
try avoiding any
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negative
comments
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because
it leads them to feel unhappy.
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, if there were spots on your
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clothes
, you would
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think
that you will receive
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comments. This feeling aggravates your mental health condition.

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not least, the
first
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, your
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affect
on others’ vision about you.
For example
, if you had a
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bad
word in your shirt, it would participate to build a
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bad
image about you.
However
,
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some
employers condemn
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some
type of inappropriate clothes.

In conclusion
, the
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people
tend to have fashionable
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clothes
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because
these
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clothes
lead them to mediate their emotional health. For this previous
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reason
, I
adamantly
support this vision, saying wearing a
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good
thing will modify your
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behaviour
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IELTS essay Nowadays computers are widely used in education. As a result, some people think teachers no longer play important roles in classrooms. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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