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The company you’re working offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help. In your letter, you should: describle v.1

The company you’re working offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help. In your letter, you should: describle v. 1
It is widely believed that reading books is a better way for people to develop imagination and language skill, in comparison with watching TV. From my perspective, I totally agree with this opinion, and will give my reasons below. On the one hand, people reading books certainly can enhance their creativity better than those preferring watching TV. It is undeniable that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to such imaginative thinking. For instance, if a hundred different individuals read the book “One thousand and one nights” simultaneously, it is possible for them to visualize a hundred different images of Aladdin, who is the main character in this story. In contrast, whether a hundred people watch the movie “Aladdin” on TV together, the only Aladdin that they can think of afterwards will be the one played by Mena Massoud. This demonstrates that watching TV is overcome by reading books in term of the ability to stimulate one’s imagination. On the other hand, watching TV performs a more important role in acquiring language skills, compared to reading books. This can be further seen in the fact that TV with sound effects has the ability to help watchers sharpen their listening and speaking skill effectively, thereby improving their language comprehension. Perhaps the best example of this is Khanh Vy, who is one of the most well-known young influencers in Viet Nam at the moment thanks to her linguistic ability. She is a dazzling polyglot and fluent in many languages with a variety of qualifications such as 8. 0 IELTS or HSK 6. Last year, in an interview with Forbes, she confessed that she often spent about 5 hours per day on watching movies in foreign languages without subtitles, and she believed that it is the most efficient approach for people, especially the young ones, to learn new languages. In conclusion, it seems to me that people should read books in order to develop imagination and linguistic abilities instead of watching TV due to the above-mentioned two reasons.
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widely
believed that
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reading
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books
is a better way for
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people
to develop imagination and
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language
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skill
,
in comparison
with watching TV. From my perspective, I
totally
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agree
with this opinion, and will give my reasons below.

On the one hand,
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people
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reading
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books
certainly
can enhance their creativity better than those preferring watching TV. It is undeniable that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to such imaginative thinking.
For instance
, if a hundred
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different
individuals read the
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book
“
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One thousand and one nights
”
simultaneously
, it is possible for them to visualize a hundred
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different
images of Aladdin, who is the main character in this story.
In contrast
, whether a hundred
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people
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watch
the movie “Aladdin” on TV together, the
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only
Aladdin that they can
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think
of afterwards will be the one played by
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Mena
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Massoud
. This demonstrates that watching TV
is overcome
by
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reading
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books
in term of the
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ability
to stimulate one’s imagination.

On the other hand
, watching TV performs a more
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important
role in acquiring
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language
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skills
, compared to
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reading
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books
. This can be
further
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seen
in the fact that TV with sound effects has the
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ability
to
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help
watchers sharpen their listening and speaking
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skill
effectively
, thereby improving their
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language
comprehension. Perhaps the best example of this is
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Khanh
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Vy
, who is one of the most well-known young influencers in
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Viet
Nam at the moment thanks to her linguistic
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ability
. She is a dazzling polyglot and fluent in
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many
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languages
with a variety of qualifications such as 8. 0 IELTS or
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HSK
6. Last year, in an interview with Forbes, she confessed that she
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often
spent about 5 hours per day on watching movies in foreign
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languages
without subtitles, and she believed that it is the most efficient approach for
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people
,
especially
the young
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ones
, to learn new languages.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that
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people
should read
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books
in order to develop imagination and linguistic
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abilities
instead
of watching TV due to the above-mentioned two reasons.
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IELTS essay The company you’re working offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help. In your letter, you should: describle v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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