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There is a group of people in your community that needs help. Write a letter to your company director and say– Describe this group. – What kind of help do they need? – How will this group and the community benefit from it? v.1

There is a group of people in your community that needs help. Write a letter to your company director and say– Describe this group. – What kind of help do they need? – How will this group and the community benefit from it? v. 1
Certain individuals believe that conventional newspapers and magazines will be replaced with updated technology and online books. This essay strongly agrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will first, discuss that electronic books are more convenient to read and carry at any point of time and further, outline that ebooks are more environmentally friendly. It is clear that online novels and books are easily accessible to people at any place and time. This is to say, people can read these books on their phones or iPads, while they are travelling through metros, trains or aeroplanes and at any time of the day. Moreover, they are weightless as people just need to carry their mobile phones rather than heavy books in their bags. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 80 percent of people prefer to read electronic magazines and novels instead of conventional novels as they are not only easy to carry but they can read them any time. Apart from this, online books do not harm the environment in any way. In other words, millions of trees are cut in order to produce papers for traditional newspapers, magazines and books, but in the case of electronic reading not harm is given to tress or to the natural surroundings. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The Times showed more than 60 percent of reduction in tree cuttings because of online materials available for people. To conclude, I vehemently agree that latest technology will completely eradicated the use of treaditional paper bound reasding matrieals as people find it comfortable to read online books from any place and time and it will not lead to environment degradation
Certain individuals believe that conventional newspapers and magazines will
be replaced
with updated technology and
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online
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books
. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with the aforementioned statement. This essay will
first
, discuss that electronic
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books
are more convenient to
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read
and carry at any point of
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time
and
further
, outline that
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ebooks
are more
environmentally
friendly.

It is
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clear
that
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online
novels and
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books
are
easily
accessible to
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people
at any place and
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time
. This is to say,
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people
can
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read
these
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books
on their phones or iPads, while they are travelling through metros, trains or
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aeroplanes
and at any
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time
of the day.
Moreover
, they are weightless as
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people
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just
need to carry their mobile phones
rather
than heavy
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books
in their bags. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York
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Times
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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people
prefer to
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read
electronic magazines and novels
instead
of conventional novels as they are not
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only
easy to carry
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but
they can
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read
them any time.

Apart from this,
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online
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books
do not harm the environment in any way.
In other words
, millions of trees are
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cut
in order to produce papers for traditional newspapers, magazines and
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books
,
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but
in the case of electronic reading not harm is
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given
to tress or to the natural surroundings. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The
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Times
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
more than 60 percent of reduction in tree cuttings
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because
of
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online
materials available for
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people
.

To conclude
, I
vehemently
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agree
that latest technology will completely
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eradicated
the
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use
of
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treaditional
paper bound
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reasding
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matrieals
as
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people
find it comfortable to
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read
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online
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books
from any place and
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time
and it will not lead to environment degradation
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay There is a group of people in your community that needs help. Write a letter to your company director and say– Describe this group. – What kind of help do they need? – How will this group and the community benefit from it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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