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Your company is going to organize a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference center has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference center. In you v.1

Your company is going to organize a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference center has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference center. In you v. 1
Due to competitions nowadays, of different organizations, most of the employers consider academic qualifications more crucial than life experience and personal qualities. The writer, strongly believe that it is a negative development, the reasons will discuss below, followed by a conclusion. To start with, the experiences at endeavour and personal qualities like hard working, loyal and cooperative, are considered to be most the important to considered by the employers, because having these qualities are a tremendous help so that the company will be more successful. For instance, a newly hired manager who has a huge experience and loyal when it comes to the task does not need a massive training to manage her subordinates due to her widely experienced in her previous work. In addition, she can able to manage whatever problem, because of her skills and desirable experience in dealing with the employees. Thus, it does not require a longer time to adapt the type of her job. Furthermore, although those applicants that are highly qualified due to their academic qualifications are essential. But, it takes a longer time to adapt to the environment and it requires them to have a huge trainings, like career development, and other trainings that related to their job, since they do not have enough skills on the job. For instance, a young man that applied to the glass company, had a difficulty adapting his career at first because he does not have wide background, even though he was considered as an achiever. To sum up, although academic qualifications are crucial for the organizations to be successful due to their intellectual capacity, however, I believe that, nothing can beat an employee that has a huge knowledge, skills and background at work.
Due
to competitions nowadays, of
different
organizations, most of the employers consider academic qualifications more crucial than life
experience
and personal qualities. The writer,
strongly
believe that it is a
negative
development, the reasons will discuss below, followed by a conclusion.

To
start
with, the
experiences
at
endeavour
and personal qualities like
hard working
, loyal and cooperative,
are considered
to be most the
important
to considered by the employers,
because
having these qualities are a tremendous
help
so
that the
company
will be more successful.
For instance
, a
newly
hired manager who has a huge
experience
and loyal when it
comes
to the task does not need a massive training to manage her subordinates
due
to her
widely
experienced in her previous work.
In addition
, she
can able to
manage whatever problem,
because
of her
skills
and desirable
experience
in dealing with the employees.
Thus
, it does not require a longer time to adapt the type of her job.

Furthermore
, although those applicants that are
highly
qualified
due
to their academic qualifications are essential.
But
, it takes a longer time to adapt to the environment and it requires them to have a huge
trainings
, like career development, and other trainings that related to their job, since they do not have
enough
skills
on the job.
For instance
, a young
man
that applied to the glass
company
, had a difficulty adapting his career at
first
because
he does not have wide background,
even though
he
was considered
as an achiever.

To sum up, although academic qualifications are crucial for the organizations to be successful
due
to their intellectual capacity,
however
, I believe that, nothing can beat an employee that has a huge knowledge,
skills
and background at work.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your company is going to organize a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference center has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference center. In you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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