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The college years are the best time in a person’s life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion. v.4

The college years are the best time in a person’s life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 4
In order to protect environment, countries are encouraging citizens to use cycling rather than others means of transport. Riding bicycles is more environmentally friendly, but it is not popular in a large of places. There are several this causes of this unpopular, and some solutions could be suggested rising in more common to the use to bicycles. There are several reasons for the uncommon the usage of cycling. Firstly, cycling takes more time other types of vehicles. Nowadays, modern life is getting much busy thus, individuals want to spend as little time transport as possible. Obviously, using the other mode of transport such as cars, motorbikes would take less time. Secondly, when people have to travel a long distance, they usually choose the other means of transports instead of cycling. For example, if we choose to go by car for travelling, people will feel safer in a car as they have protection around them. In addition, using car to prevent people from accidents. The government plays an important role in persuading citizens to use cycling because it is environmentally friendly. Besides, media campaign also should contain a lot of information regarding benefits of bicycle rides. When people form a habit of cycling, they would contribute to reducing pollution from the vehicle's exhaust met to the environment. To illustrate, Taiwan is using type of public cycling. This operating system helps people to move easier and increase health training. Moreover, in order to help people faster to travel with bicycles, the government should build lanes serve only cyclists. In conclusion, cycling is a positive influence on the environment, so the countries should take immediate actions to promote human awareness among using bicycles more popular
In order to protect environment, countries are encouraging citizens to
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use
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cycling
rather
than others means of
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transport
. Riding
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bicycles
is more
environmentally
friendly,
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but
it is not popular in a large of places. There are several this causes of this unpopular, and
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some
solutions could
be suggested
rising in more common to the
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use
to bicycles.

There are several reasons for
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the uncommon the
usage of
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cycling
.
Firstly
,
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cycling
takes more time
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other
types of vehicles. Nowadays, modern life is getting much busy
thus
, individuals want to spend as
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little
time
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transport
as possible.
Obviously
, using the
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other
mode of
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transport
such as
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cars
, motorbikes would take less time.
Secondly
, when
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people
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have to
travel a long distance, they
usually
choose the
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other
means of
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transports
instead
of
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cycling
.
For example
, if we choose to go by
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car
for travelling,
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people
will feel safer in a
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car
as they have protection around them.
In addition
, using
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car
to
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prevent
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people
from accidents.

The
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government
plays an
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important
role in persuading citizens to
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use
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cycling
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because
it is
environmentally
friendly.
Besides
, media campaign
also
should contain
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a lot of
information regarding benefits of
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bicycle
rides. When
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people
form a habit of
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cycling
, they would contribute to reducing pollution from the vehicle's exhaust met to the environment. To illustrate, Taiwan is using type of public
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cycling
. This operating system
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helps
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people
to
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move
easier and increase health training.
Moreover
, in order to
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help
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people
faster to travel with
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bicycles
, the
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government
should build lanes serve
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only
cyclists.

In conclusion
,
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cycling
is a
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positive
influence on the environment,
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so
the countries should take immediate actions to promote human awareness among using
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bicycles
more popular
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The college years are the best time in a person’s life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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