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The city will increse the price for the buss tickets for the students. State the women's opinion and explain why she is having this opinion. v.1

The city will increse the price for the buss tickets for the students. State the women's opinion and explain why she is having this opinion. v. 1
Recently, it is becoming popular for people to be tutored via the Internet, instead of the traditional classroom learning method. This essay will discuss the advantages of online schooling and will give reasons why I am of the opinion that the traditional way of teaching in classes cannot be replaced by internet learning. To begin, learning on the internet is becoming trendy due to the certain reasons. Firstly, it is cheaper for the school. When students learn through internet facilities, the school authorities spend less amount of money on maintenance of the amenities in the school, since the pupils are not there to make use of them. For instance, in a UK University, after making a comparison between expenditures involved in teaching via the internet and within the school premises, it was noticed that classroom learning was more costly, hence more students were counselled to learn online. Secondly, through online mode of learning, students can be tutored from their comfort zones. They do not have to travel down to their educational institutions. For example, in the University of Adelaide, there are more people learning via internet correspondence than those who learn in the classrooms because they think it is more relaxing. Despite these advantages, I think online learning cannot be preferred to the classroom pattern of imparting information. This is because receiving lectures in classes is more effective. When students are taught in classes, the contact with the teachers make the students understand their lessons more than the internet way. For example, when students in Wuhan, China, were asked what manner of tutorials they wanted, the opinion polls showed that those who think classroom learning was more effective, was higher. In addition, those who learn within the school environment interact and establish contact with their classmates which enhances their knowledge of what they were tutored about. For these reasons, I think schooling online will not replace classroom learning. To sum up, although internet learning is common because it is convenient and cheap, I think schooling in classes would still remain, as they are more effective, and help in interactions among pupils.
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people
to
be tutored
via the Internet,
instead
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learning
method. This essay will discuss the advantages of
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online
schooling and will give reasons why I am of the opinion that the traditional way of teaching in
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classes
cannot
be replaced
by internet learning.

To
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begin
,
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learning
on the internet is becoming trendy due to the certain reasons.
Firstly
, it is cheaper for the
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school
. When
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students
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learn
through internet facilities, the
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school
authorities spend less amount of money on maintenance of the amenities in the
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school
, since the pupils are not there to
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make
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use
of them.
For instance
, in a UK University, after making a comparison between expenditures involved in teaching via the internet and within the
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school
premises, it
was noticed
that classroom
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learning
was more costly,
hence
more
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students
were counselled
to
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learn
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online
.
Secondly
, through
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online
mode of
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learning
,
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students
can
be tutored
from their comfort zones. They do not
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have to
travel down to their educational institutions.
For example
, in the University of Adelaide, there are more
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people
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learning
via internet correspondence than those who
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learn
in the classrooms
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because
they
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think
it is more relaxing.

Despite these advantages, I
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think
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online
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learning
cannot
be preferred
to the classroom pattern of imparting information. This is
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because
receiving lectures in
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classes
is more effective. When
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students
are taught
in
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classes
, the contact with the teachers
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make
the
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students
understand their lessons more than the internet way.
For example
, when
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students
in Wuhan, China,
were asked
what manner of tutorials they wanted, the opinion polls
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showed
that those who
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think
classroom
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learning
was more effective, was higher.
In addition
, those who
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learn
within the
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school
environment interact and establish contact with their classmates which enhances their knowledge of what they
were tutored
about. For these reasons, I
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think
schooling
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online
will not replace classroom learning.

To sum up, although internet
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learning
is common
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because
it is convenient and
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cheap
, I
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think
schooling in
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classes
would
still
remain, as they are more effective, and
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help
in interactions among pupils.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The city will increse the price for the buss tickets for the students. State the women's opinion and explain why she is having this opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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