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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university. Summarize the information by s v.1

The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
Some people have the opinion that it is their choice to select any sport while the rest think that high-risk sports activities should be prohibited by government bodies. This essay will try to explore both the side and will draw a conclusion. On the one hand, adventurous sports recreates enthusiasm, builds strength, increase confidence in one's day to day life and also involves a certain checklist to qualify. However, it allows sportsmen to showcase their capability to represent their country and gain popularity on a larger platform. For instance, sports-person like Mary Kom in boxing, Khali in wrestling, is the popular name in the international sports fraternity. Furthermore to this, such extreme sports are always a centre of attraction for the tourist that helps in earning foreign exchange. On the other hand, extreme sports are performed with all considering factors like skill, risk, health issues, age, and safety. Moreover, safety guards are compulsorily used to avoid injuries because accidents are unavoidable if proper majors are not considered, but they cannot restrain a person from the liberty to play. However, the juvenile should not be allowed in such life-threatening sports. Furthermore to this, instead of banning, the lawmaker should implement the law to cover health and life insurance for the sports-person and their family members. Because there are many cases in which families are unable to bear the expenses in severe injuries while playing a match. Banning the danger sports is not the solution. In conclusion, lawmakers should implement stringent laws on safety precautions of the players.
Some
people
have the opinion that it is their choice to select any
sport
while the rest
think
that high-
risk
sports
activities should
be prohibited
by
government
bodies. This essay will try to explore both the side and will draw a conclusion.

On the one hand, adventurous
sports
recreates enthusiasm, builds strength, increase confidence in one's
day to day
life and
also
involves a certain checklist to qualify.
However
, it
allows
sportsmen to showcase their capability to represent their country and gain popularity on a larger platform.
For instance
, sports-person like Mary
Kom
in boxing,
Khali
in wrestling, is the popular name in the international
sports
fraternity.
Furthermore
to this, such extreme
sports
are always a
centre
of attraction for the tourist that
helps
in earning foreign exchange.

On the other hand
, extreme
sports
are performed
with all considering factors like
skill
,
risk
, health issues, age, and safety.
Moreover
, safety guards are
compulsorily
used
to avoid injuries
because
accidents are unavoidable if proper majors are not considered,
but
they cannot restrain a person from the liberty to play.
However
, the juvenile should not be
allowed
in such life-threatening
sports
.
Furthermore
to this,
instead
of banning, the lawmaker should implement the law to cover health and life insurance for the sports-person and their family members.
Because
there are
many
cases in which families are unable to bear the expenses in severe injuries while playing a match.

Banning the
danger
sports
is not the solution.
In conclusion
, lawmakers should implement stringent laws on safety precautions of the players.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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