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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.13

Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? v. 13
The internet has revolutionized the human interaction by introducing various social websites which are becoming popular amongst all the ages, but providing the discrete personal data on these websites can have serious ramifications. In my opinion, I consider that the benefits of improved communication among the population by utilising social media networks outweigh the drawback of interference with the privacy and the confidentiality. Despite the minimal drawbacks below, I believe that the main advantage of social media is a convenient communication between individuals. In other words, the world is becoming smaller as people residing in different continents can interact and see each other by overcoming great distances through the various social media applications available on the internet. For instance, during my 2 years stay in Liberia located in West Africa, I managed to interact with my family in Pakistan, almost daily by using WhatsApp, which would have been otherwise impossible. It is obvious that social networking on the web is bringing people closer and distances would not matter in the today’s modern world. Admittedly, there is a minimal drawback of social websites and it includes an infiltration to the privacy of an individual. In other words, information about a person’s location, family details and his interests can be extracted by manipulating the social media accounts. For instance, internet banking frauds are on the rise due to the manipulation of the personal data available on the social media. However, this threat can be overcome by restricting limited personal data sharing on social networks, which can enable us to make use of this facility without any imperil to our privacy and confidentiality. In conclusion, I consider that the chief advantage of social media by ensuring convenient and easily accessible communication far outweigh the easily manageable few minor drawbacks. I hope that cyber security awareness can help to combat the drawbacks of social media.
The internet has revolutionized the human interaction by introducing various
social
websites which are becoming popular amongst all the ages,
but
providing the discrete personal data on these websites can have serious ramifications. In my opinion, I consider that the benefits of
improved
communication
among
the population by
utilising
social
media
networks outweigh the
drawback
of interference with the privacy and the confidentiality.

Despite the minimal
drawbacks
below, I believe that the main advantage of
social
media
is a convenient communication between individuals.
In other words
, the world is becoming smaller as
people
residing in
different
continents can interact and
see
each other by overcoming great distances through the various
social
media
applications available on the internet.
For instance
, during my 2 years stay in Liberia located in West Africa, I managed to interact with my family in Pakistan, almost daily by using WhatsApp, which would have been
otherwise
impossible. It is obvious that
social
networking on the web is bringing
people
closer and distances would not matter in the
today
’s modern world.

Admittedly
, there is a minimal
drawback
of
social
websites and it includes an infiltration to the privacy of an individual.
In other words
, information about a person’s location, family
details
and his interests can
be extracted
by manipulating the
social
media
accounts.
For instance
, internet banking frauds are on the rise due to the manipulation of the personal data available on the
social
media
.
However
, this threat can
be overcome
by restricting limited personal data sharing on
social
networks, which can enable us to
make
use
of this facility without any imperil to our privacy and confidentiality.

In conclusion
, I consider that the chief advantage of
social
media
by ensuring convenient and
easily
accessible communication far outweigh the
easily
manageable few minor
drawbacks
. I hope that cyber security awareness can
help
to combat the
drawbacks
of
social
media
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? v. 13

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311 words
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