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The charts below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. v.1

The charts below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020.
DUE TO THE CREATION OF TECHNOLOGY, THERE IS SAID TO BE A REDUCTION IN HUMANS BODILY MOBILITY, HAVING A HARMFUL IMPACT ON THEIR PHYSIOLOGICAL WELLBEING. IN MY OPINION, IT'S TRUE BECAUSE OF DEPENDENCY ON GADGETS, AUTOMOBILES AND ROBOTS. AFTER THE INTRODUCTION OF ELECTRONIC APPLIANCES SUCH AS VIDEO GAMES, A WHOLE LOT OF PEOPLE FOUND IT FASCINATING AND HIGHLY INDULGING. HOWEVER, A GREAT PART OF THEIR SPARE TIME WAS ALLOCATED TO IT. IT IS SAID TO BE VERY DETRIMENTAL TO HEALTH BECAUSE IT INVOLVED LITTLLE OR NO MOVEMENT. FOR THIS REASON, LESS AND LESS CARDIOVASCULAR FUNCTION. AN INSTANCE IS, WHEN I WAS A CHILD, I GOT INVOLVED IN A HOUSE FIRE WHICH AFFECTED MY UPPER TRUNK. THE DOCTOR ADVICED ME TO TRY AS MUCH AS POSSIBLE TO MOVE AROUND FOR FEW HOURS DAILY, I WAS SO DISTRAUGHT AND DID NOT HEED TO HIS WORD AND SPENT ALL MY DAYS WATCHING TELEVISION. CONSEQUENTLY, I HAD A PRESSURE SORE DUE TO SITTING DOWN ALL DAY AND IT WAS A COMPLICATION THAT COULD HAVE EASILY BEEN AVOIDED. ANOTHER POINT TO CONSIDER, IS THAT SINCE THE INVENTION OF CARS, TRAINS AND BUSES PEOPLE BELIEVE THEY DO NOT HAVE THE NEED TO WALK ANYMORE. THEY EXPEDITIOUSLY MAKE USE OF THE AFFOREMENTIONED TO GO ABOUT THEIR DAILY ACTIVITIES. TO THROW MORE LIGHT ON THIS, A MAN DESPITE BEING PROMPTED ON SEVERAL OCCASIONS BY HIS FIT BIT, WHICH IS A FORM OF WRISTWATCH THAT CALCULATES HEART RATE, RESPIRATION AND SO ON, THAT HE SHOULD STAND UP AND MOVE AROUND, COLLAPSED AT HIS WORKING PLACE DUE TO A BURST ARTERY A CONDITION CALLED ANEURYSM. THE CARDIAC SPECIALIST TOLD HIM ONE THING, IF ONLY YOU MOVED AROUND MORE THIS WOULD HAVE BEEN AVOIDED. ONE OF THE MAJOR REASONS OF ROAD ACCIDENTS IS THE USE OF CELLPHONES AMONGST TEENAGERS AND YOUNG ADULTS. PHONES PROVIDE A NUMBER OF PAST TIME ACTVITIES LIKE SOCIAL MEDIA PLATFORMS USING THE INTERNET. SIMILARLY, PEOPLE CAN ALSO TALK TO THEIR FRIENDS THROUGH THIS MEANS. THERE ARE NO LIMITS TO COMMUNICATING BECAUSE IT IS WORLDWIDE. ADMITTEDLY, COMMUNICATION CAN BE VERY ENGAGING. HENCE, CAUSING A LOT OF DISTRACTIONS WHICH CAN RANGE FROM MILD TO SEVERE. TO ILLUSTRATE, JUST RECENTLY THERE WAS A BAD CASE OF SCHOOL MISHAP WHICH WAS BROUGHT ABOUT BY THE APPLICATION OF A MOBILE PHONE DURING ONE OF THE EXTRA CURRICULLAR ACTIVITY CALLED THE SWING. IT WAS BELIEVED TO HAVE HAPPENED WHEN A STUDENT GOT A MESSAGE FROM A LOVE INTEREST AND WAS SO EXCITED THAT SHE SWUNG VERY HIGH AND HIT A BYPASSER AND AS A RESULT, FRACTURED HIS SHOULDER. IN CONCLUSION, OWING TO THE UPSUREG IN FATALITY RATE WHILE DRIVING AND TEXTIING, CASES OF PRESSURE ULCER AND INCREASE IN POOR CARDIOVASCULAR HEALTH RELATING TO IMMOBILITY, THE INTRODUCTION OF TECHNOLOGY HAS BROUGHT ABOUT MORE DEMERITS THAN ANY POSSIBLE MERIT IT MIGHT HAVE.
DUE TO THE CREATION OF TECHNOLOGY, THERE
IS SAID
TO BE A REDUCTION IN HUMANS
BODILY
MOBILITY, HAVING A HARMFUL IMPACT ON THEIR PHYSIOLOGICAL
WELLBEING
. IN MY OPINION, IT'S TRUE
BECAUSE
OF DEPENDENCY ON GADGETS, AUTOMOBILES AND ROBOTS.

AFTER THE INTRODUCTION OF ELECTRONIC APPLIANCES SUCH AS VIDEO GAMES, A
WHOLE LOT
OF
PEOPLE
FOUND IT FASCINATING AND
HIGHLY
INDULGING.
HOWEVER
, A GREAT PART OF THEIR SPARE TIME
WAS ALLOCATED
TO IT. IT
IS SAID
TO BE
VERY
DETRIMENTAL TO HEALTH
BECAUSE
IT INVOLVED
LITTLLE
OR NO MOVEMENT.
FOR THIS REASON
, LESS AND LESS CARDIOVASCULAR FUNCTION. AN INSTANCE IS, WHEN I WAS A CHILD, I
GOT
INVOLVED IN A
HOUSE
FIRE WHICH
AFFECTED
MY UPPER TRUNK. THE DOCTOR
ADVICED ME
TO TRY AS MUCH AS POSSIBLE TO
MOVE
AROUND FOR FEW HOURS DAILY, I WAS
SO
DISTRAUGHT AND DID NOT HEED TO HIS WORD AND SPENT ALL MY DAYS WATCHING TELEVISION.
CONSEQUENTLY
, I HAD A PRESSURE SORE DUE TO SITTING DOWN ALL DAY AND IT WAS A COMPLICATION THAT COULD HAVE
EASILY
BEEN AVOIDED
.

ANOTHER POINT TO CONSIDER, IS THAT SINCE THE INVENTION OF CARS, TRAINS AND BUSES
PEOPLE
BELIEVE THEY DO NOT HAVE THE NEED TO WALK ANYMORE. THEY
EXPEDITIOUSLY
MAKE
USE
OF THE
AFFOREMENTIONED
TO GO ABOUT THEIR DAILY ACTIVITIES. TO THROW MORE LIGHT ON THIS, A
MAN
DESPITE
BEING PROMPTED
ON SEVERAL OCCASIONS BY HIS FIT BIT, WHICH IS A FORM OF WRISTWATCH THAT CALCULATES HEART RATE, RESPIRATION AND
SO
ON, THAT HE SHOULD STAND UP AND
MOVE
AROUND, COLLAPSED AT HIS WORKING PLACE DUE TO A BURST ARTERY A CONDITION CALLED ANEURYSM. THE CARDIAC SPECIALIST
TOLD
HIM ONE THING, IF
ONLY
YOU
MOVED
AROUND MORE THIS WOULD HAVE
BEEN AVOIDED
.

ONE OF THE MAJOR REASONS OF ROAD ACCIDENTS IS THE
USE
OF CELLPHONES AMONGST
TEENAGERS
AND YOUNG ADULTS. PHONES PROVIDE A NUMBER OF
PAST TIME
ACTVITIES
LIKE SOCIAL MEDIA PLATFORMS USING THE INTERNET.
SIMILARLY
,
PEOPLE
CAN
ALSO
TALK TO THEIR FRIENDS THROUGH THIS MEANS. THERE ARE NO LIMITS TO COMMUNICATING
BECAUSE
IT IS WORLDWIDE.

ADMITTEDLY
, COMMUNICATION CAN BE
VERY
ENGAGING.
HENCE
, CAUSING
A LOT OF
DISTRACTIONS WHICH CAN RANGE FROM MILD TO SEVERE. TO ILLUSTRATE,
JUST
RECENTLY THERE WAS A
BAD
CASE OF SCHOOL MISHAP WHICH
WAS BROUGHT
ABOUT BY THE APPLICATION OF A MOBILE PHONE DURING ONE OF THE EXTRA
CURRICULLAR
ACTIVITY CALLED THE SWING. IT
WAS BELIEVED
TO HAVE HAPPENED WHEN A STUDENT
GOT
A MESSAGE FROM A
LOVE
INTEREST AND WAS
SO
EXCITED THAT SHE SWUNG
VERY
HIGH AND HIT A
BYPASSER
AND
AS A RESULT
, FRACTURED HIS SHOULDER.

IN CONCLUSION
, OWING TO THE
UPSUREG
IN FATALITY RATE WHILE DRIVING AND
TEXTIING
, CASES OF PRESSURE ULCER AND INCREASE IN POOR CARDIOVASCULAR HEALTH RELATING TO IMMOBILITY, THE INTRODUCTION OF TECHNOLOGY HAS BROUGHT ABOUT MORE DEMERITS THAN ANY POSSIBLE MERIT IT MIGHT HAVE.
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IELTS essay The charts below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020.

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