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Integrated speaking (Question 4)the reading is about the animal behavior and nocturnal is one of these behavior and the lecture is about an example of nocturnal which is a bat (micro and mega) v.1

Integrated speaking (Question 4)the reading is about the animal behavior and nocturnal is one of these behavior and the lecture is about an example of nocturnal which is a bat (micro and mega) v. 1
It is important for people to consider, which type of accommodation they should live in. While some believe it is better to live in a house, others feel that living in a flat offers more benefits. This essay will explain why I believe the drawbacks of living in a house are outweighed by its positives when compared to life in an apartment. Considering firstly the negatives of houses, an important one is that this kind of accommodation tends to be less secure. This is because a vast majority of houses are only protected by a single or double lock on the front door, with occasionally a rarely-used burglar alarm inside. Furthermore, houses are usually only one or two storeys high, low enough for a burglar to see through and enter via a window. Contrast this with apartment blocks, which are frequently equipped with surveillance cameras, security guards and other forms of criminal deterrence and hence more secure. However, the main advantages of living in a house are that they are often more spacious and more private. With regards to former, houses typically have multiple rooms to allow plenty of space for leisure and relaxation, which is especially useful for families with children. As for the latter, at lease in the case of a detached house, greater privacy is possible because the noise does not carry through one wall and into the neighbouring residence. Conversely, not only are flats generally smaller, but they are also less private due to neighbours living in very close proximity. In conclusion, I think that the advantages of space and privacy that come with living in a house outweigh the disadvantages of less security in comparison with living in an apartment.
It is
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important
for
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people
to consider, which type of accommodation they should
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live
in. While
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some
believe it is better to
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live
in a
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house
, others feel that
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living
in a flat offers more benefits. This essay will
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explain
why I believe the drawbacks of
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living
in a
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house
are outweighed
by its positives when compared to life in an apartment.

Considering
firstly
the negatives of
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houses
, an
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important
one is that this kind of accommodation tends to be less secure. This is
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because
a vast majority of
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houses
are
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only
protected by a single or double lock on the front door, with
occasionally
a rarely-
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used
burglar alarm inside.
Furthermore
,
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houses
are
usually
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only
one or two
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storeys
high, low
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enough
for a burglar to
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see
through and enter via a window. Contrast this with apartment blocks, which are
frequently
equipped with surveillance cameras, security guards and other forms of criminal deterrence and
hence
more secure.

However
, the main advantages of
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living
in a
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house
are that they are
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often
more spacious and more private.
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
former,
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houses
typically
have multiple rooms to
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allow
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plenty
of space for leisure and relaxation, which is
especially
useful for families with children. As for the latter, at lease in the case of a detached
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house
, greater privacy is possible
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because
the noise does not carry through one wall and into the
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neighbouring
residence.
Conversely
, not
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only
are flats
generally
smaller,
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but
they are
also
less private due to
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neighbours
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living
in
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very
Consider using "proximity".
close proximity
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that the advantages of space and privacy that
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come
with
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living
in a
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house
outweigh the disadvantages of less security
in comparison
with
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living
in an apartment.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Integrated speaking (Question 4)the reading is about the animal behavior and nocturnal is one of these behavior and the lecture is about an example of nocturnal which is a bat (micro and mega) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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