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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009 v.1

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009 v. 1
It is common today an improvement public well-being is a topic that has risen disagreement among society. Several individuals claim that the appropriate method to increase people state of strength is by developing a number of athletic equipment, by contrast, others believe that it might have slight impact on public and that others activities are needed. This essay will examine both views and provide a logical conclusion. There is a common belief that healthy public is the result of growing numbers of fun facilities. The main reason is that training body helps individuals to maintain it fit and normal. For example, in numerous of modern states there is a lot of game features like swimming pool, fitness clubs, tennis courts, football field, even playground with all equipments and other varieties of abilities to do sport. Turning to the other side of the argument, many people claim that public fitness does not depend only on the game, there are a multitude of other measures that are required. This is because they say it is a state of health should be supported by not only training body, but also food, internal state, without stress, and the exception unhealthy food, alcohol and cigarettes. To illustrate, in the USA there are a lot of opportunities to do fun, however it’s a big share of the public have a bad nutrition and it is the reason why there are a huge proportion of people with overweigh. To conclude, personally, I suppose that the well-being of each person depends on its own desire. Despite this, game facilities and nutrition have a big influence on public energy as well.
It is common
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today
an improvement
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public
well-being is a topic that has risen disagreement among society. Several individuals claim that the appropriate method to increase
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people
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state
of strength is by developing a number of athletic equipment, by contrast, others believe that it might have slight impact on
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public
and that others activities
are needed
. This essay will examine both views and provide a logical conclusion.

There is a common belief that healthy
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public
is the result of growing numbers of fun facilities. The main reason is that training body
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helps
individuals to maintain it fit and normal.
For example
, in numerous of modern
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states
there is
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a lot of
game features like swimming pool, fitness clubs, tennis courts, football field, even playground with all equipments and
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other
varieties of abilities to do sport.

Turning to the
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other
side of the argument,
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many
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people
claim that
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public
fitness does not depend
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only
on the game, there are a multitude of
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other
measures that
are required
. This is
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because
they say it is a
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state
of health should
be supported
by not
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only
training body,
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also
food, internal
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state
, without
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stress
, and the exception unhealthy food, alcohol and cigarettes. To illustrate, in the USA there are
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a lot of
opportunities to do fun,
however
it’s a
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big
share of the
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public
have a
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bad
nutrition and it is the reason why there are a huge proportion of
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people
with
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overweigh
.

To conclude
,
personally
, I suppose that the well-being of each person depends on its
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own
desire. Despite this, game facilities and nutrition have a
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big
influence on
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public
energy
as well
.
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IELTS essay The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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