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The charts below show information about three different deserts around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons. v.2

The charts below show information about three different deserts around the world.
The given tabular representation describes the data about the various desert in the world. Record contains mainly three ocean of the sand: Sahara desert, Taklimakam Desert and great basin desert. As seen clearly from the first table, Sahara desert is the one of the largest desert in the world with 9, 000, 000 sq meter, whereas taklimakam desert take place in second position with 337, 600 sq km. Moreover considering the rainfall, desert in Asia has minimum rain in east part of the sandy region about 1. 0 cm, while west side has a bit more rain about 3. 8 cm. Moving further, temperature ratio in Great basin desert and Sahara desert almost equal to each other. Furthermore, in desert in Asia has recorded extremes temperature about -26. 1 C, which is the lowest in three sandy region. Same as in other side highest temperature accounted in desert in North America, which is one celsius less than temperature in sandy part of the Africa. Overall, Sahara desert is the biggest desert. Also, Taklimakam desert get less rainfall compare to other desert.
The
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given
tabular representation
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describes
the data about the various
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desert
in the world. Record contains
mainly
three
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ocean
of the sand:
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Sahara
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desert
,
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Taklimakam
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Desert
and great basin desert.

As
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seen
clearly
from the
first
table,
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Sahara
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desert
is the one of the largest
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desert
in the world with 9, 000, 000 sq
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meter
, whereas
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taklimakam
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desert
take place in second position with 337, 600 sq km.
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Moreover
considering the rainfall,
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desert
in Asia has minimum rain in east part of the sandy region about 1. 0 cm, while west side has a bit more rain about 3. 8 cm.

Moving
further
,
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temperature
ratio in Great basin
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desert
and
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Sahara
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desert
almost equal to each other.
Furthermore
, in
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desert
in Asia has recorded extremes
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temperature
about -26. 1 C, which is the lowest in three sandy
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region
. Same as in other side highest
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temperature
accounted in
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desert
in North America, which is one
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celsius
less than
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temperature
in sandy part of the Africa.

Overall
,
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Sahara
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desert
is the biggest
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desert
.
Also
,
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Taklimakam
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desert
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get
less rainfall compare to other
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desert
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The charts below show information about three different deserts around the world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
181 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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