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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v.1

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 1
The first bar chart gives an analysis of the number of divorces and marriages in the USA over a period of 30 years from 1970 to 2000, while the second bar chart shows the marital status of American citizens in the years 1970 and 2000. From the data it is clear that the number of marriages in that country showed a declining trend in the period under review, while the number of divorces over the given period remained more or less the same except in 1980 when it showed a hike. This decline in the number of marriage is evident when data for the years 1970 and 2000 are compared. It can be seen that the number of divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000 remained a steady one million except for the year 1980 when this figure touched nearly one and a half million. On the other hand, the figures for marriages showed a downward trend with two and a half million couples getting married in 1970 to two million couples doing the same thirty years later. When the marital status of Americans is analysed, it can be seen that 70% of the adults were married in 1970 while this figure was 60% in 2000. Meanwhile, in the year 2000, 20% of the adults remained single while this figure was 15% for the year 1970. It is also seen that the divorced individuals were less than 5% in 1970, while in 2000 this figure was nearly double when compared to 1970.
The
first
bar chart gives an analysis of the
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number
of divorces and
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marriages
in the USA over a period of 30 years from 1970 to 2000, while the second bar chart
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shows
the marital status of American citizens in the years 1970 and 2000.

From the data it is
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clear
that the
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number
of
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marriages
in that country
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showed
a declining trend in the period under review, while the
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number
of divorces over the
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given
period remained more or less the same except in 1980 when it
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showed
a hike. This decline in the
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number
of
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marriage
is evident when data for the years 1970 and 2000
are compared
. It can be
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seen
that the
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number
of divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000 remained a steady one
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million
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except for
the
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year
1980 when this
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figure
touched
nearly
one and a half
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million
.
On the other hand
, the
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figures
for
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marriages
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showed
a downward trend with two and a half
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million
couples getting married in 1970 to two
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million
couples doing the same thirty years later.

When the marital status of Americans is
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analysed
, it can be
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seen
that 70% of the adults
were married
in 1970 while this
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figure
was 60% in 2000. Meanwhile, in the
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year
2000, 20% of the adults remained single while this
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figure
was 15% for the
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year
1970. It is
also
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seen
that the divorced individuals were less than 5% in 1970, while in 2000 this
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figure
was
nearly
double when compared to 1970.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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