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The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer s total sales in North America South America Europe and Asia v.1

The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer s total sales in North America South America Europe and Asia v. 1
Recently, there has been an alarming increase in the amount of waste we are generating as a society. One of the main reasons why this bad habit is on the rise, is that people are now becoming more wasteful and things are now cheaper. This is challenging for every government, but I believe that instructing schools to start educating children about the importance and need of proper management of resources as well as increasing taxes of commonly disposed items will solve this problem. The primary reason why an average home is now producing more trash than before is solely because humans are now wasteful. In other words, we are likely to trash something rather than look for an alternative use for it. Because of the advancement in technology, most things are readily available so we no longer value them. For instance, in the past after peeling an orange and eating it, one can still use it to make juice instead of trashing them, but now we have all kinds of orange drinks available and as a result of this we no longer value them. Furthermore, another reason for this new development is that things are not as expensive as they use to be. For example, there was only one company that produces bottled water in Angola for several years, which make it quite expensive and as a result of this people. People usually keep the bottle after drinking the water to serve another purpose like a juice container. However, this is no longer the case since we have a lot of factories now making bottled water and it’s now affordable by the masses. How can the government solve this problem? Firstly, they should encourage schools to start teaching children how not to waste things. They are the upcoming generation and starting with them is the very first step and also a long time solution to this issue. Secondly, the government should increase the taxes on the commonly wasted items as this will make people to be less wasteful and this money can also go into research on how to reduce waste in the community. To conclude, there is a significant amount of waste being generated by humans currently than we did decades ago and this because we are richer now and no longer appreciate things. The government can end all that by inflating the taxes on commonly wasted items and also educating the youngsters.
Recently, there has been an alarming increase in the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
we are generating as a society. One of the main reasons why this
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bad
habit is on the rise, is that
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people
are
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now
becoming more wasteful and things are
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now
cheaper. This is challenging for every
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government
,
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but
I believe that instructing schools to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
educating children about the importance and need of proper management of resources
as well
as increasing taxes of
commonly
disposed items will solve this problem.

The primary reason why an average home is
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now
producing more trash than
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before
is
solely
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because
humans are
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now
wasteful.
In other words
, we are likely to trash something
rather
than look for an alternative
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use
for it.
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Because
of the advancement in technology, most things are
readily
available
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so
we no
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longer
value them.
For instance
, in the past after peeling an orange and eating it, one can
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
juice
instead
of trashing them,
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but
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now
we have all kinds of orange drinks available and
as a result
of this we no
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longer
value them.

Furthermore
, another reason for this new development is that things are not as expensive as they
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use to
be.
For example
, there was
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only
one
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company
that produces bottled water in Angola for several years, which
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make
it quite expensive and
as a result
of this
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people
.
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People
usually
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keep
the bottle after drinking the water to serve another purpose like a juice container.
However
, this is no
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longer
the case since we have
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a lot of
factories
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now
making bottled water and it’s
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now
affordable by the masses.

How can the
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government
solve this problem?
Firstly
, they should encourage schools to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
teaching children how not to
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waste
things. They are the upcoming generation and starting with them is the
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very
first
step and
also
a long time solution to this issue.
Secondly
, the
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government
should increase the taxes on the
commonly
wasted items as this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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people
to be less wasteful and this money can
also
go into research on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
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waste
in the community.

To conclude
, there is a significant amount of
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waste
being generated
by humans
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currently
than we did decades ago and this
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because
we are richer
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now
and no
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longer
appreciate things. The
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government
can
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end
all that by inflating the taxes on
commonly
wasted items and
also
educating the youngsters.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer s total sales in North America South America Europe and Asia v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
404 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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