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The chart shows the number of students in the UK universities who completed (on time or late) failed to write and rewrote their dissertation in 1990, 2000, 2010. v.1

The chart shows the number of students in the UK universities who completed (on time or late) failed to write and rewrote their dissertation in 1990, 2000, 2010. v. 1
It is known that aviation is increasing these days and for that their costs are of much significance. It is considered that air fares have reduced noticeably over the last few years, which made traveling much more feasible. This essay will discuss the positive and negative perspectives of this change. There are many advantages of decline in the cost of flying. Most importantly, it has made trade between different countries more accessible, which would have certain positive impacts on the country's economy. Import/export, for instance, are significantly affected by the airline tickets. Another positive aspect is, tourism would be more common in such a way that people would feel more comfortable to visit other countries by taking out short visit visas and get around. This would also benefit both, the host country and the tourist. On the other there are also several disadvantages which can not be neglected. This trend, however, depicts a negative impact on the businesses of commercial airlines. Although, passengers feel comfortable with cheaper tickets, airline companies cannot earn in an amount the way they were before, which would ultimately affect their quality. For example, recently due to drop in the rate of Dollar, certain air routes are handicapped to provide the quality travel to passengers due to dwindling business. Another important disadvantage is that passenger turn out become so increased by this trend, which in turn proved troublesome for the travelers. Lower costs will greatly affect passenger outcome and thus cause the delay of flights in greatly busiest stations like Dubai, Manchester or Paris. In conclusion, air travel is totally cost effective. If there comes a certain change in the prices of flight tickets, there would be a huge impact on the accessibility for the voyagers as a result, this would lead to both positive and negative aspects. Whatever they are, either relating to business, tourism or alternatively heavy traffic problems, cost is affecting every prospect.
It
is known
that aviation is increasing these days and for that their
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costs
are of much significance. It
is considered
that air fares have
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reduced
noticeably
over the last few years, which made traveling much more feasible. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
perspectives of this
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change
.

There are
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many
advantages of decline in the
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cost
of flying. Most
importantly
, it has made trade between
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different
countries more accessible, which would have certain
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positive
impacts on the country's economy. Import/export,
for instance
, are
significantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by the airline tickets. Another
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positive
aspect is, tourism would be more common in such a way that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would feel more comfortable to visit other countries by taking out short visit visas and
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get
around. This would
also
benefit both, the host country and the tourist.

On the other there are
also
several disadvantages which can not
be neglected
. This trend,
however
, depicts a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the businesses of commercial airlines. Although,
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passengers
feel comfortable with cheaper tickets, airline
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
cannot earn in an amount the way they were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
, which would
ultimately
affect their quality.
For example
, recently due to drop in the rate of Dollar, certain air routes
are handicapped
to provide the quality travel to
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passengers
due to dwindling business. Another
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
disadvantage is that
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passenger
turn out become
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so
increased by this trend, which in turn proved troublesome for the travelers. Lower
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costs
will
greatly
affect
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passenger
outcome and
thus
cause the delay of flights in
greatly
A determiner is probably missing here: "the busiest".
busiest
stations like Dubai, Manchester or Paris.

In conclusion
, air travel is
totally
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cost
effective. If there
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
a certain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in the prices of flight tickets, there would be a huge impact on the accessibility for the voyagers
as a result
, this would lead to both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects. Whatever they are, either relating to business, tourism or
alternatively
heavy traffic problems,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cost
is affecting every prospect.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart shows the number of students in the UK universities who completed (on time or late) failed to write and rewrote their dissertation in 1990, 2000, 2010. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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