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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where r v.1

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
If technology has made people more connected or less, is a topic that is often argued upon. While most people think that technology disconnects people, I am of the strong opinion that it brings people closer. To begin with, there is a little merit in the argument that people indulge in devices and gadgets to an extent that human contact is minimized a little. People tend to get so immersed in their virtual circle that they forget their immediate, real world. For example, it is a common sight in restaurants where a family that is sitting on a table, are all so engrossed in their phones that they are not talking to each other. Products like cell phones do tend to distant people and make them a little unsocial However, that's just one side of the story. A lot of inventions in the area of communication have enabled us to connect to humans beyond our geographies. One gets to connect and interact with people across the globe, based on common past like same school or colleges; or shared interests like trekking or music. Without the advent of social media, it would have been impossible to get in touch with your school friends who are now settled in London. Consider, for an example, web portals like Facebook and WhatsApp have helped billions of people stay in touch with their friends, family and even strangers who you share interests with. It opens a whole new world for us and gives us access to a wide range of social activities. To conclude, while the point that technology has distanced people a bit does hold a little truth, my strong opinion is it has brought people closer, thereby making man more social.
If technology has made
people
more connected or less, is a topic
that is
often
argued upon. While most
people
think
that technology disconnects
people
, I am of the strong opinion that it brings
people
closer.

To
begin
with, there is a
little
merit in the argument that
people
indulge in devices and gadgets to an extent that human contact
is minimized
a
little
.
People
tend to
get
so
immersed in their virtual circle that they forget their immediate, real world.
For example
, it is a common sight in restaurants where a family
that is
sitting on a table, are all
so
engrossed in their phones that they are not talking to each other. Products like cell phones do tend to distant
people
and
make
them a
little
unsocial

However
, that's
just
one side of the story.
A lot of
inventions in the area of communication have enabled us to connect to humans beyond our geographies. One
gets
to connect and interact with
people
across the globe, based on common past like same school or colleges; or shared interests like trekking or music. Without the advent of social media, it would have been impossible to
get
in touch with your school friends who are
now
settled in London. Consider, for an example, web portals like Facebook and WhatsApp have
helped
billions of
people
stay in touch with their friends, family and even strangers who you share interests with. It opens a whole new world for us and gives us access to a wide range of social activities.

To conclude
, while the point that technology has distanced
people
a bit does hold a
little
truth, my strong opinion is it has brought
people
closer, thereby making
man
more social.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
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