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The chart below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990 2000 and 2010 v.1

The chart below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990 2000 and 2010 v. 1
Nowadays everyone is interested in sharing their personal reviews on the internet, whatever they purchased goods, hence it's benefit to the new buyers in many ways. I will argue sharing views is how it will ultimately benefit to the customer. Firstly, Due to globalization, many products is coming to market from different countries, but same time no one saying what is good and bad on the items. In current generation many people are interested to share their personal view on the internet what ever purchased, therefore it's automatically reached with public very fast and useful to the customers, because they can easily analysis on the brand and purchase if they interested. Secondly, most of the reviewers compared same device with different companies henceforth purchaser can easily understand the quality and price. For Example As per the latest CNN survey many companies before launching material to market, they are doing analysing through YouTube based on the trend upgrading the stock. On the other hand, Mainly due to this kind of reviews it's not benefiting to the consumer because if reviewer given bad feedback most of the people don't like to purchase hence the company value will reduce in the market. On the top of that buyers are confusing because in search engine many reviews are there for one product, moreover, many of the reviewers don't have proper contact information in online therefore we cannot able to trust with the reviews. In conclusion, I have argued that online product reviews are best to purchase a new item because buyer easily identify the value of the item and it's worth to spend an amount on required product or not and finally benefit to consumers.
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is interested
in sharing their personal
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reviews
on the internet, whatever they
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purchased
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goods
,
hence
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it's
benefit to the new buyers in
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many
ways. I will argue sharing views is how it will
ultimately
benefit to the customer.

Firstly
, Due to globalization,
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many
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products
is coming to market from
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different
countries,
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but
same time no one saying what is
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good
and
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bad
on the items. In
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current
generation
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many
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people
are interested
to share their personal view on the internet what ever
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purchased
,
therefore
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it's
automatically
reached with public
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very
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fast
and useful to the customers,
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because
they can
easily
analysis on the brand and
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purchase
if they interested.
Secondly
, most of the reviewers compared same device with
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different
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companies
henceforth purchaser can
easily
understand the quality and price.
For Example
As per the latest CNN
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survey
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many
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companies
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before
launching material to market, they are
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going analysing".
doing analysing
through YouTube based on the trend upgrading the stock.

On the other hand
,
Mainly
due to this kind of
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reviews
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it's
not benefiting to the consumer
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because
if reviewer
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given
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bad
feedback most of the
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people
don't like to
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purchase
hence
the
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company
value will
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reduce
in the market. On the top of that buyers are confusing
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because
in search engine
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many
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reviews
are there for one
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product
,
moreover
,
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many
of the reviewers don't have proper contact information in online
therefore
we
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cannot able
to trust with the reviews.

In conclusion
, I have argued that online
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product
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reviews
are best to
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purchase
a new item
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because
buyer
easily
identify the value of the item and
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it's
worth to spend an amount on required
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product
or not and
finally
benefit to consumers.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The chart below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990 2000 and 2010 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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