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The chart displays the quantity of oil production and consumption in million barrels per day in seven areas of the world in the year 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant. v.1

The chart displays the quantity of oil production and consumption in million barrels per day in seven areas of the world in the year 2005.
As we evolve, some values become inferior to others. Nowadays, it might seem like an individual’s worth is judged by the social status and material possessions owned by that person, but it is not always true. The society and the people we interact with in our daily life are changing, whenever one gets rich or have the power to buy expensive goods and services, then they start taking control of certain things. This might be because of the influence of the celebrity behaviour towards an individual. They wish to act or live their life, but end up losing friends or involve in certain drug/alcohol activity which harm them and makes them negligible in the neighbourhood. Furthermore, with power and money one can buy expensive things, but cannot compare/buy trust, friendship or honour. Nevertheless, I do believe that in our daily life people still believe in values such as honour, respect and kindness because this is what defines them or makes them different from each other. When we are growing up, we are taught to become better citizens of the nation and protect our communities from any harm. Moreover, we still form relationship, business partnerships, and romances on the basis of trust and when this trust is revoked, we end the relationship without event thinking about it twice. In conclusion, I think that status and possessions have become the norms of the society on which an individual worth is measured, but a fair amount of people does believe in the old- fashioned conscience.
As we evolve,
some
values become inferior to others. Nowadays, it might seem like an individual’s worth
is judged
by the social status and material possessions
owned
by that person,
but
it is not always true.

The society and the
people
we interact with in our daily life are changing, whenever one
gets
rich or have the power to
buy
expensive
goods
and services, then they
start
taking control of certain things. This might be
because
of the influence of the celebrity
behaviour
towards an individual. They wish to act or
live
their life,
but
end
up losing friends or involve in certain drug/alcohol activity which harm them and
makes
them negligible in the
neighbourhood
.
Furthermore
, with power and money one can
buy
expensive things,
but
cannot compare/
buy
trust, friendship or
honour
.

Nevertheless
, I do believe that in our daily life
people
still
believe in values such as
honour
, respect and kindness
because
this is what defines them or
makes
them
different
from each other. When we are growing up, we
are taught
to become better citizens of the nation and protect our communities from any harm.
Moreover
, we
still
form relationship, business partnerships, and romances on the basis of trust and when this trust
is revoked
, we
end
the relationship without
event
thinking about it twice.

In conclusion
, I
think
that status and possessions have become the norms of the society on which an individual worth
is measured
,
but
a
fair
amount of
people
does believe in the
old
- fashioned conscience.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart displays the quantity of oil production and consumption in million barrels per day in seven areas of the world in the year 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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