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The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world.
It is pertinent for children to know the distinction between good and bad early in life. Therefore, punishment is commonly viewed as a useful vehicle required to achieving this objective. In my opinion, while I completely agree with this viewpoint that punishing children is vital to teaching them to distinguish what is wrong from what is right, the manner of deterrents I advocate for erring children are reprimanding them verbally and denying them certain privileges over a period of time. I believe punishment is a viable tool that is necessary in training a child to differentiate between what is acceptable and unacceptable in society. The compelling reason for this is because when you do not rod the rod from mischievous people, they instinctively put in effort to make amends as it feels wrong to continue in that way, knowing it will attract similar reaction the next time they repeat such action. Consequently, learning from their own experience of how unpalatable these treatments are, children subconsciously decide not to tow that path again. One major punitive measure I recommend to parents and tutors for their wards, which is requisite to raising children with excellent moral, is through scolding them where necessary. In other words, whenever children do something stupid, parents should not excuse them, but rather constructively use words to put them in their rightful space. Meanwhile, words are especially potent in this guise as they are capable of moulding the character of these individuals in their formative years. Children want parental approval and praise, and if they are not given, they make a conscious effort to earn it by doing what will get them in their parents’ good book. Furthermore, depriving children of some privileges, which they usually enjoy, when they misbehave is another effective way of teaching them this difference. For instance, depriving teenagers of that extra vacation or game time because they have betrayed their guardians’ trust through a sheer act of disobedience has been shown by research to yield good results, considering children will always do things that would afford them the luxury of enjoying these occasions. In conclusion, it is often thought that punishment is a veritable way to correcting children in order to learn to separate good from evil. It is my view that this is absolutely imperative because it provides them the personal experience that they could use as guide in making right and socially acceptable decision. Although there are various type of punishments that could work, verbally correcting children and withholding some benefits from them are the two leading approaches of actualizing this goal without causing any harm to their young impressionable minds.
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children
to know the distinction between
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good
and
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bad
early in life.
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punishment
is
commonly
viewed as a useful vehicle required to achieving this objective. In my opinion, while I completely
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agree
with this viewpoint that punishing
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children
is vital to teaching them to distinguish what is
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wrong
from what is right, the manner of deterrents I advocate for erring
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children
are reprimanding them
verbally
and denying them certain privileges over a period of time.

I believe
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punishment
is a viable tool
that is
necessary in training a child to differentiate between what is acceptable and unacceptable in society. The compelling reason for this is
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because
when you do not rod the rod from mischievous
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people
, they instinctively put in effort to
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make
amends as it feels
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wrong
to continue in that way, knowing it will attract similar reaction the
next
time they repeat such action.
Consequently
, learning from their
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own
experience of how unpalatable these treatments are,
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children
subconsciously
decide not to tow that path again.

One major punitive measure I recommend to parents and tutors for their wards, which is requisite to raising
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children
with excellent moral, is through scolding them where necessary.
In other words
, whenever
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children
do something stupid, parents should not excuse them,
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but
rather
constructively
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use
words to put them in their rightful space. Meanwhile, words are
especially
potent in this guise as they are capable of
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moulding
the character of these individuals in their formative years.
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Children
want parental approval and praise, and if they are not
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given
, they
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make
a conscious effort to earn it by doing what will
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get
them in their parents’
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good
book.
Furthermore
, depriving
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children
of
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some
privileges, which they
usually
enjoy, when they misbehave is another effective way of teaching them this difference.
For instance
, depriving
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teenagers
of that extra vacation or game time
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because
they have betrayed their guardians’ trust through a sheer act of disobedience has
been shown
by research to yield
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good
results, considering
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children
will always do things that would afford them the luxury of enjoying these occasions.

In conclusion
, it is
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often
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thought
that
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punishment
is a veritable way to correcting
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children
in order to learn to separate
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good
from evil. It is my view that this is
absolutely
imperative
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it provides them the personal experience that they could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
as guide in making right and
socially
acceptable decision. Although there are various type of
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punishments
that could work,
verbally
correcting
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children
and withholding
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some
benefits from them are the two leading approaches of actualizing this goal without causing any harm to their young impressionable minds.
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IELTS essay The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
440 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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