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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, Divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v.1

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, Divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 1
The relevance of nurseries is growing at a high rate, therefore many people tend to believe that attending to preschool preparation centres, such as kindergartens, is essential for children' growth. However, another part is convinced that nurseries are not that important, as they seem to be. This following essay will consider both statements, and discuss perspectives on the children's overall progression. It is clear that the nurseries have provided youngster's parents an opportunity to leave their child for a time in special centres, without any worries. Due to busy schedules, adults are not able to take care of their children, properly. Consequently, they enrol their child to the local kindergarten, where the youngster receives appropriate care and acquires some basic cognitive and vital life skills. Nurseries tend to develop in children the desire to learn and study, also such centres ameliorate some essential social habits, such as safety behaviour in a crowded place or setting new relationships with people. However, others are not considering nurseries' impact on children' overall performance, as effective and productive way to study. They strongly believe that kindergartens can not find a proper approach to their students, due to varieties in the behaviour and uniqueness of every child. Notwithstanding the fact that such phenomenon usually takes place in public nurseries, it is very beneficial in the perspective of preschool preparation. They have an enormous positive effect on children' basic knowledges and vitally important skills To conclude, attending to nurseries before a primary school has a big amount of advantages and I strongly believe that there is no need for a child to stay at home for a long period of time.
The relevance of
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nurseries
is growing at a high rate,
therefore
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many
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people
tend to believe that attending to preschool preparation
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centres
, such as kindergartens, is essential for
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children'
growth.
However
, another part
is convinced
that
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nurseries
are not that
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important
, as they seem to be. This following essay will consider both statements, and discuss perspectives on the
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children's
overall
progression.

It is
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clear
that the
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nurseries
have provided youngster's parents an opportunity to
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leave
their
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child
for a time in special
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centres
, without any worries. Due to busy schedules, adults are not able to take care of their children,
properly
.
Consequently
, they enrol their
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child
to the local kindergarten, where the youngster receives appropriate care and acquires
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some
basic cognitive and vital life
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skills
.
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Nurseries
tend to develop in children the desire to learn and study,
also
such
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centres
ameliorate
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some
essential social habits, such as safety
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behaviour
in a crowded place or setting new relationships with
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people
.

However
, others are not considering nurseries' impact on
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children'
overall
performance, as effective and productive way to study. They
strongly
believe that kindergartens can not find a proper approach to their students, due to
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varieties in
the
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behaviour
and uniqueness of every
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child
. Notwithstanding the fact that such phenomenon
usually
takes place in public
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nurseries
, it is
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very
beneficial in the perspective of preschool preparation. They have an enormous
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positive
effect on
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children'
basic
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knowledges
and
vitally
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important
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skills


To conclude
, attending to
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nurseries
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before
a primary school has a
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big
amount of advantages and I
strongly
believe that there is no need for a
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child
to stay at home for a long period of time.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, Divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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