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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v.1

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 1
Spending quality moments with parents is very important, but it's not like that kids should spend all of their spare time chit chatting with them. Every coin has two sides. The Majority of people would agree with this point and there would a few who would disagree. In my opinion, there should be a fair distribution of their break time. We shall be discussing both the views in following paragraphs. First of all, the energy invested in relationship never get wasted. Because family bonding is equally important. By having a short break with their guardian children can learn about their family history. For example: A recent study has shown that kids who spend their time with aged members in the family, have known their grand parents or great grand parent better than their Father or Mother. Furthermore, there should be proper use of the moment when they have nothing to do, it should not be contributed at one place. As a parent it is our duty to make their fun duration useful. This can be done by making them to learn various household chores by playway method. For example: Asking them to clean their room by themselves. This way they will understand the value and importance of keeping their surroundings clean. To summarize, children learn from their family first. Their environment plays an important role in building their character, they learn what they see. Therefore, I recommend that break from studies should be fairly distributed among various activities at home.
Spending quality moments with
parents
is
very
important
,
but
it's not like that kids should spend all of their spare time
chit chatting
with them. Every coin has two sides. The Majority of
people
would
agree
with this point and there would a few who would disagree. In my opinion, there should be a
fair
distribution of their break time. We shall be discussing both the views in following paragraphs.

First of all
, the energy invested in relationship never
get
wasted.
Because
family
bonding is
equally
important
. By having a short break with their guardian children can
learn
about their
family
history.
For example
: A recent study has shown that kids who spend their time with aged members in the
family
, have known their grand
parents
or great grand
parent
better than their Father or Mother.

Furthermore
, there should be proper
use
of the moment when they have nothing to do, it should not
be contributed
at one place.
As
a
parent
it is our duty to
make
their fun duration useful. This can
be done
by making them to
learn
various household chores by
playway
method.
For example
: Asking them to clean their room by themselves. This way they will understand the value and importance of keeping their surroundings clean.

To summarize
, children
learn
from their
family
first
. Their environment plays an
important
role in building their character, they
learn
what they
see
.
Therefore
, I recommend that break from studies should be
fairly
distributed among various activities at home.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
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