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The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v.1

The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v. 1
Travelling is an ideal solution to cut stress. Weekend getaways destinations are attracting huge tourist during national holidays. This essay will explain problems related to traffic and waste management in these locations during these breaks, and also suggest solutions to prevent these issues. There are a couple of drawbacks of seasonal tourism. Firstly, the tourist favourite spots is always hit by traffic jams. Secondly, the destinations face issues of waste management as the number of litters increases during peak period. As a result, people have to stand in long queues to visit their favourite spot, and at the same time, they throw empty wrappers on the streets. For instance, during Independence Day all streets towards Red Fort are packed with vehicles and footpaths are covered with empty plastic wrappers and bottles because of people from all over the India travel to Delhi for Flag hoisting ceremony. The solution to eliminating these issues are promoting the use of public transport as well as set up dustbins at every footpath with a 100-meter gap. Moreover, during national holidays the government should transfer an ample amount of traffic force to popular tourist destinations. To illustrate, during Christmas break the government in Goa installs portable bin and every beach, and also gets mobile restrooms near and around every bathing spot. To conclude, major concerns of tourism during national holidays is traffic congestion as well as waste disposals, and both of the issues could be extinct if the government has proper legislation during national holidays at every hot tourist getaway.
Travelling is an ideal solution to
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cut
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stress
. Weekend getaways destinations are attracting huge
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tourist
during
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national
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holidays
. This essay will
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explain
problems related to
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traffic
and waste management in these locations during these breaks, and
also
suggest solutions to
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prevent
these issues.

There are a couple of drawbacks of seasonal tourism.
Firstly
, the
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tourist
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favourite
spots is always hit by
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traffic
jams.
Secondly
, the destinations face issues of waste management as the number of litters increases during peak period.
As a result
,
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people
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have to
stand in long queues to visit their
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favourite
spot, and at the same time, they throw empty wrappers on the streets.
For instance
, during Independence Day all streets towards Red Fort
are packed
with vehicles and footpaths
are covered
with empty plastic wrappers and bottles
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because
of
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people
from all over the India travel to Delhi for Flag hoisting ceremony.

The solution to eliminating these issues are promoting the
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use
of public transport
as well
as set up dustbins at every footpath with a 100-meter gap.
Moreover
, during
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national
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holidays
the
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government
should transfer an ample amount of
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traffic
force to popular
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tourist
destinations. To illustrate, during Christmas break the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in Goa installs portable bin and every beach, and
also
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gets
mobile restrooms near and around every bathing spot.

To conclude
, major concerns of tourism during
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national
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holidays
is
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traffic
congestion
as well
as waste disposals, and both of the issues could be extinct if the
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government
has proper legislation during
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national
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holidays
at every hot
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tourist
getaway.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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