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The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000 with an estimate of the situation in 2050 Summarise the information v.1

The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000 with an estimate of the situation in 2050
Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion It is claimed by an overwhelming majority of people that keeping animals in zoos is vicious. However, others believe that zoos are the suitable house for protecting animals against natural threats. I am of the opinion that national parks are the best area for animals and it ensures that animals do not suffer from poor conditions. On the one hand, there are some prominent reasons why zoos can be seen as a proper area for animals. Firstly, animals which are kept in zoos have a higher quality of life than animals who are in the wild. This is mainly because animals in good zoos get a varied and high-quality diet with all the supplements required, and any illness that they might have will be treated. In addition, the average captive animals will have the greatest life expectancy compared with its wild counterpart. This is due the fact that they live in a safe environment and they do not suffer from the threat or stress of predators and also they will not die of drought or starvation. On the other hand. there are some animals which find it difficult to adapt themselves with the conditions at normal zoos. For example, these artificial habitats for elephants are almost always too small and the fences restrict their natural desire to follow specific migratory pattern. When an elephant is unable to accomplish instinctive tasks, it has an emotional reaction that is similar to what humans would experience in that situation. In conclusion, I suppose as national parks are not restricted in terms of zone and have the positive aspects of zoos as well, they are the best choice to keep animals.
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people
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that zoos are all cruel and should
be closed
down. Others,
however
, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

Discuss both opinions and give your
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own
opinion

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is claimed
by an overwhelming majority of
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people
that keeping
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animals
in zoos is vicious.
However
, others believe that zoos are the suitable
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house
for protecting
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animals
against natural threats. I am of the opinion that national parks are the best area for
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animals
and it ensures that
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animals
do not suffer from poor conditions.

On the one hand, there are
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some
prominent reasons why zoos can be
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seen
as a proper area for
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animals
.
Firstly
,
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animals
which are
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kept
in zoos have a higher quality of life than
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who are in the wild. This is
mainly
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because
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animals
in
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good
zoos
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get
a varied and high-quality diet with all the supplements required, and any illness that they might have will
be treated
.
In addition
, the average captive
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animals
will have the greatest life expectancy compared with its wild counterpart. This is due the fact that they
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live
in a safe
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environment and
they do not suffer from the threat or
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stress
of predators and
also
they will not
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die
of drought or starvation.

On the other hand
.
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there
are
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animals
which find it difficult to adapt themselves with the conditions at normal zoos.
For example
, these artificial habitats for elephants are almost always too
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small
and the fences restrict their natural desire to follow specific migratory pattern. When an elephant is unable to accomplish instinctive tasks, it has an emotional reaction
that is
similar to what humans would experience in that situation.

In conclusion
, I suppose as national parks are not restricted in terms of zone and have the
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positive
aspects of zoos
as well
, they are the best choice to
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keep
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animals
.
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IELTS essay The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000 with an estimate of the situation in 2050

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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