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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.
Whether, it is to book an air ticket or buy groceries, the internet has reached to the daily needs of every person. The advancement in the technology has made lives easier and prosperous. But, prosperity comes with a cost. There are pros and cons of using the technology to save you time. I also feel that, there are a lot of advantages of buying things on the internet, without completely neglecting the disadvantages. Nowadays, people are investing more on shopping, as the products are readily available at their fingertip. There are a variety of options available for the same product. Consumers can easily compare the options based on the public review. Increasing trend of shopping online also boosts the economic status of a country. The internet is connecting the globe, so people can easily endorse their brand on social media. This has a direct impact on an increase in the export and import of products in the global market. On the other hand, the internet has drastically increased the number of travellers across the globe. People can easily book their tickets online in a few minutes and travel to any part of the world. Recent records show that the number of travellers has increased dramatically over the last decade. This has also created some new professions like travel blogger etc. Though, internet has made life easier, it has also brought some security concerns. Nefarious people are luring consumers to buy defective products which are shown in a perfect shape online. Consumers are easily trapped into the fake offers and end up wasting their money. In addition to this, it is also decreasing our social connect. Earlier, people used to go to the shops to buy groceries or books. This was very helpful in building relationship with the shopkeeper. They also ensured that the product is not faulty or of bad quality, before buying. This resulted in investing their hard-earned money on quality products which lasted longer. Lastly, with some precautions and attentiveness, advantages of shopping online certainly outweighs the disadvantages. Moreover, consumers need to be careful while investing money online, read the reviews carefully and don't get swayed by the fake offers.
Whether, it is to book an air ticket or
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buy
groceries, the internet has reached to the daily needs of every person. The advancement in the technology has made
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lives
easier and prosperous.
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But
, prosperity
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comes
with a cost. There are pros and cons of using the technology to save you time. I
also
feel that, there are
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a lot of
advantages of buying things on the internet, without completely neglecting the disadvantages.

Nowadays,
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people
are investing more on shopping, as the
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products
are
readily
available at their fingertip. There are a variety of options available for the same
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product
.
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Consumers
can
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easily
compare the options based on the public review. Increasing trend of shopping
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online
also
boosts the economic status of a country. The internet is connecting the globe,
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so
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people
can
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easily
endorse their brand on social media. This has a direct impact on an increase in the export and import of
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products
in the global market.

On the other hand
, the internet has
drastically
increased the number of
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travellers
across the globe.
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People
can
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easily
book their tickets
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online
in a few minutes and travel to any part of the world. Recent records
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show
that the number of
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travellers
has increased
dramatically
over the last decade. This has
also
created
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some
new professions like travel blogger etc.

Though, internet has made life easier, it has
also
brought
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some
security concerns. Nefarious
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people
are luring
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consumers
to
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buy
defective
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products
which
are shown
in a perfect shape
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online
.
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Consumers
are
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easily
trapped into the fake offers and
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end
up wasting their money.
In addition
to this, it is
also
decreasing our social connect. Earlier,
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people
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used
to go to the shops to
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buy
groceries or books. This was
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very
helpful in building relationship with the shopkeeper. They
also
ensured that the
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product
is not faulty or of
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bad
quality,
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before
buying. This resulted in investing their
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hard
-earned money on quality
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products
which lasted longer.

Lastly
, with
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some
precautions and attentiveness, advantages of shopping
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online
certainly
outweighs the disadvantages.
Moreover
,
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consumers
need to be careful while investing money
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online
, read the reviews
carefully
and don't
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get
swayed by the fake offers.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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