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The chart below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate Summarise the informtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The chart below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate Summarise the informtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v. 1
It is opined by some people that artists need a large extent of liberty to strengthen their creativity, hence, they should be allowed utmost freedom of expression of their notions and thoughts. I totally disagree with this belief because absolute autonomy can be abused and there might be increased incidence of crime. In detail, although some people are of the view that people involved in the arts should be allowed total freedom to express themselves. I absolutely disagree with this because there is a tendency to misuse to complete liberty when given. If artists are at totally free to express their ideas, they may use it as an avenue to be overly expressive which may be detrimental to the society. To illustrate, musicians promote nudity with the way they dress because they are given utmost freedom to express themselves in their music. Additionally, allowing artists a great amount of autonomy to show what they think can lead to a rise in criminal acts. Artists are known to be extremist and have weird thoughts which could be harmful to other citizens if they are allowed to express them without limits. For example, in Miami, Florida, there was a case of serial killing, and it was discovered that the culprit was a well-known writer who wanted to experience what the characters in his books felt when they kill. In conclusion, it is believed by some people that artists should be completely free to be expressive of their notions and ideas. However, I absolutely disagree with this on account of abuse of excess liberty and the possibility of the increase of illegal acts.
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some
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people
that
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artists
need a large extent of liberty to strengthen their creativity,
hence
, they should be
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allowed
utmost freedom of expression of their notions and thoughts. I
totally
disagree with this belief
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because
absolute autonomy can
be abused
and there might
be increased
incidence of crime.

In detail, although
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some
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people
are of the view that
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people
involved in the arts should be
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allowed
total freedom to
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express
themselves. I
absolutely
disagree with this
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because
there is a tendency to misuse to complete liberty when
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given
. If
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artists
are at
totally
free to
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express
their
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ideas
, they may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it as an avenue to be
overly
expressive which may be detrimental to the society. To illustrate, musicians promote nudity with the way they dress
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because
they are
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given
utmost freedom to
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express
themselves in their music.

Additionally
, allowing
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artists
a great amount of autonomy to
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show
what they
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think
can lead to a rise in criminal acts.
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Artists
are known
to be extremist and have weird thoughts which could be harmful to other citizens if they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
express
them without limits.
For example
, in Miami, Florida, there was a case of serial killing, and it
was discovered
that the culprit was a well-known writer who wanted to experience what the characters in his books felt when they kill.

In conclusion
, it
is believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
should be completely free to be expressive of their notions and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
However
, I
absolutely
disagree with this on account of abuse of excess liberty and the possibility of the increase of illegal acts.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The chart below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate Summarise the informtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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