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The chart below give information about the highspeed continuous internet connection of households in five countries in 2001 and 2002 v.1

The chart below give information about the highspeed continuous internet connection of households in five countries in 2001 and 2002 v. 1
Education has always been an important part of most people’s life. While some people think that education should only last for a short period of time, this essay is written to argue that education has transformed into a vital factor that lasts for people’s lifetime. Some people assert that education should not be time-consuming and therefore should end immediately after one acquired sufficient necessary knowledge. For example, people who want to pursuit a given trade or profession can attend vocational schools and institutions that teach only job-related skills and practical know-how without costing too much time of the learners. With this approach, people can save more time, money and effort and allocate these resources for other purposes that suits their needs. Despite these advantages, it is believed that people would be in a better position if they continue to learn after finishing their college degree or getting a trade qualification. Firstly, today’s society is fast-changing and extremely competitive, which presents people with new types of challenge that have never existed in the past. It is not a surprise that people without updated knowledge and skills will struggle to adapt and live well in the new environment. Secondly, with the advance of technology, it has never been easier for people to acquire knowledge of a particular subject if they wish to. The Internet and modern technological devices have enabled students to study at anytime and anywhere they want. As a result, different methods of studying, such as e-learning or distance learning, have been introduced in universities and predicted to become much more popular in the future. In conclusion, there is no point arguing that there are certain benefits of studying for a short period of time, such as saving time and money. Nevertheless, it should be highlighted modern technology has made knowledge so much more accessible and that continuously learning could provide many more advantages including better adapt to changing conditions.
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has always been an
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important
part of most
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people’s
life. While
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some
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people
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think
that
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education
should
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only
last for a short period of
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time
, this essay
is written
to argue that
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education
has transformed into a vital factor that lasts for
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people’s
lifetime.

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Some
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people
assert that
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education
should not be time-consuming and
therefore
should
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end
immediately after one acquired sufficient necessary
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knowledge
.
For example
,
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people
who want to pursuit a
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given
trade or profession can attend vocational schools and institutions that teach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
job-related
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and practical know-how without costing too much
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time
of the learners. With this approach,
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people
can save more
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time
, money and effort and allocate these resources for other purposes that suits their needs.

Despite these advantages, it
is believed
that
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people
would be in a better position if they continue to learn after finishing their college degree or getting a trade qualification.
Firstly
,
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today
’s society is
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fast
-changing and
extremely
competitive, which presents
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people
with new types of challenge that have never existed in the past. It is not a surprise that
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people
without updated
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knowledge
and
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skills
will struggle to adapt and
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live
well in the new environment.
Secondly
, with the advance of technology, it has never been easier for
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people
to acquire
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knowledge
of a particular subject if they wish to. The Internet and modern technological devices have enabled students to study at anytime and anywhere they want.
As a result
,
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different
methods of studying, such as e-learning or distance learning, have
been introduced
in universities and predicted to become much more popular in the future.

In conclusion
, there is no point arguing that there are certain benefits of studying for a short period of
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time
, such as saving
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time
and money.
Nevertheless
, it should
be highlighted
modern technology has made
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knowledge
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so
much more accessible and that
continuously
learning could provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more advantages including better adapt to changing conditions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart below give information about the highspeed continuous internet connection of households in five countries in 2001 and 2002 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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