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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan
The bar graph and table illustrate figure for population in Japan which was recorded from 1950 to the present year and predicted until 2055, over one century period, and measured in millions. Overall, Japan’s population experienced an upward trend which also was experienced by population of people aged over-65s. However, both trends were reverse at the end of the period. In 1950, the number of population in Japan was the lowest over the period, at 84. 1 million. This figure experienced a significant increase in each 5 years and then reached the peak at 127. 8 million in 2005. The fairly similar trend was witnessed by the figure for over-65s aged people. While in 1950 it was merely 4. 1 million or just 4. 9 percent of the total population, it increased dramatically to 20. 0 percent or 25. 7 million people in 2005. Surprisingly, since such year, the percentage of over-65s aged people remained increasing significantly until the end of the period although Japan’s population followed a downward trend. In 2055, such figure peaked at 36. 5 million or 41. 0 percent of total Japan’s population, almost ten times higher than that of over-65s aged people in 1950. However, population of Japanese generally experienced a dramatic decreaseby about 38 million people from 2005 to 2055. In the end of period, Japan’s population was predicted at barely 89. 9 million.
The bar graph and table illustrate
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peaked at 36. 5
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IELTS essay The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
230 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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