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The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012
Colleges must create a syllabus for its students, so that they have varied general knowledge in order to make conscious decisions in crucial matters instead of preparing them merely for the workplace. I certainly agree with the viewpoint held. Individuals choose universities based on the career choice they are aiming for. For example, if a student wishes to become a doctor he will study science, or if he wants to be a teacher he will study humanities. Educational institutions are viewed, as buildings that embody knowledge. They exist, because of a clearly defined goal to impart information to generations of mankind. Although it is a mandate for schools to teach pupils' skills required for the designated job, it is crucial to learn general knowledge as well. For example, a child must know the name of his country's president, national animal, or sport etc. These may seem as trivial requirements, but are nevertheless vital. An overview of news around the world shapes the mindset of people. They are able to participate in activities that involve their civil rights for instance, voting. But if citizens are unaware of the larger picture, certain outcomes will affect them. On the contrary, there is also an increase in unemployment. Society has always set ground rules for different stages of life. Even though learners spend huge funds on courses for their dream job, they are unable to secure a job. This situation of demand, and supply may have some discrepancies. In conclusion, it is important to have knowledge outside the syllabus requirements.
Colleges
must
create a syllabus for its students,
so
that they have varied general
knowledge
in order to
make
conscious decisions in crucial matters
instead
of preparing them
merely
for the workplace. I
certainly
agree
with the viewpoint held.

Individuals choose universities based on the career choice they are aiming for.
For example
, if a student wishes to become a doctor he will study science, or if he wants to be a teacher he will study humanities. Educational institutions
are viewed
, as buildings that embody
knowledge
. They exist,
because
of a
clearly
defined goal to impart information to generations of mankind. Although it is a mandate for schools to teach pupils'
skills
required for the designated job, it is crucial to learn general
knowledge
as well
.
For example
, a child
must
know the name of his country's president, national animal, or sport etc. These may seem as trivial requirements,
but
are
nevertheless
vital. An overview of news around the world shapes the mindset of
people
. They are able to participate in activities that involve their civil rights
for instance
, voting.
But
if citizens are unaware of the larger picture, certain outcomes will affect them.

On the contrary
, there is
also
an increase in unemployment. Society has always set ground
rules
for
different
stages of life.
Even though
learners spend huge funds on courses for their dream job, they are unable to secure a job. This situation of demand, and supply may have
some
discrepancies.

In conclusion
, it is
important
to have
knowledge
outside the syllabus requirements.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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