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The charls below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
Environmental pollution is a challenge battled by most countries all over the world. Some people are of the opinion that raising the tariffs on petrol is the most effective method of tackling the problem of increasing traffic and pollution. I totally disagree with this view, as other measures such as reduction in the use of private cars and creating transport systems that does not use fossil fuel are better productive techniques of curtailing traffic congestion and pollution. First, increasing the value of petrol in order to control traffic and environmental pollution is counterproductive as the result of this action might not be significant when compared to other means such as reducing the rate at which people use personal cars. This is because, the purchase of petrol will still be on-going irrespective of the price, as there are other ways by which this inflation can be compensated. For example; In the year 2002, when the price of fuel was inflated in Lagos the report of traffic problems was still the same as when fuel price was subsidize in 1999. However, it was noticed that cost of commodities increased significantly. Thus, it is clear that increasing the price of fuel have no serious correlation to controlling traffic jams. However, there are other vital means of dealing with traffic and pollution that are productive. Firstly, Reducing the use of personal vehicles has proven to be one of the most effective ways to tackle traffic and pollution. For instance, if government should mandate the use of public transportation and also creating regulations that bind the use of private cars on the flexibility of usage, this will greatly lead to a decline in the number vehicles that appear on the road, which will lead to reductions in the emission of fumes that causes depletion of the ozone layer. Also, creating other means of transport such as railways which can convey a large group number of people at a time is another effective way of reducing traffic. In conclusion, innovation of other transporting system and regulative the use of cars are better techniques of controlling traffic and pollution. Thus, this should be implemented.
Environmental
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pollution
is a challenge battled by most countries all over the world.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that raising the tariffs on petrol is the most effective method of tackling the problem of increasing
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traffic
and
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pollution
. I
totally
disagree with this view, as
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other
measures such as reduction in the
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use
of private
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cars
and creating transport systems that does not
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use
fossil
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fuel
are better productive techniques of curtailing
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traffic
congestion and pollution.

First
, increasing the value of petrol in order to control
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traffic
and environmental
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pollution
is counterproductive as the result of this action might not be significant when compared to
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other
means such as reducing the rate at which
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people
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use
personal
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cars
. This is
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because
, the
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purchase
of petrol will
still
be
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on-going
irrespective of the
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price
, as there are
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other
ways by which this inflation can
be compensated
.
For example
; In the year 2002, when the
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price
of
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fuel
was inflated
in Lagos the report of
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traffic
problems was
still
the same as when
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fuel
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price
was
Consider using a past participle here: "subsidized".
subsidize
in 1999.
However
, it
was noticed
that cost of commodities increased
significantly
.
Thus
, it is
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clear
that increasing the
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price
of
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fuel
have no serious correlation to controlling
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traffic
jams.

However
, there are
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other
vital means of dealing with
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traffic
and
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pollution
that are productive.
Firstly
, Reducing the
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use
of personal vehicles has proven to be one of the most effective ways to tackle
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traffic
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
.
For instance
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should mandate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transportation and
also
creating regulations that bind the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private
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cars
on the flexibility of usage, this will
greatly
lead to a decline in the number vehicles that appear on the road, which will lead to reductions in the emission of fumes that causes depletion of the ozone layer.
Also
, creating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
means of transport such as railways which can convey a large group number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
at a time is another effective way of reducing traffic.

In conclusion
, innovation of
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other
transporting system and regulative the
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use
of
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cars
are better techniques of controlling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
.
Thus
, this should
be implemented
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The charls below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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