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The best way to understand other culture is to work for a multinational company or organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to understand other culture is to work for a multinational company or organization. v. 1
Some people suggest that the most effective way to understand another culture is to work in a company with employees from different countries. Although you may have a glimpse of the culture of your colleagues, I believe that this not the most viable way to learn another culture. By working with other nationalities one may learn at least a part of their way of life and other practices. For example, on what type of food they eat and the way they consume it. However, asking and knowing are not good enough for us to fully understand their culture. In addition, working in multinational company does not guarantee that you will be dealing with another race. There are certain company positions that do not require a lot of dealing with others, like for example being a software developer whose job is mostly on computer encoding and very seldom has the chance to talk with other colleagues. There are better ways to fully understand others culture. One of which is by visiting their own place to experience their culture. By going in someone’s locality, we have the chance to practice their culture and that way we will fully learn and appreciate it. For instance, in Japan they have the practice of being too respectful and punctual by experiencing this we will fully understand it clearly. Furthermore, reading books regarding culture is another good way to gain knowledge of other cultures. Norms and ways of life are being discussed and it is a helpful source of information. Though working in a multicultural company provides you a glimpse of someone's culture, I don’t think this is the best way to learn others culture. There are better ways to do it like visiting places and reading books.
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is to work in a
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with employees from
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of your colleagues, I believe that this not the most viable
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another culture.

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other
nationalities one may
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at least a part of their
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way
of life and
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other
practices.
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, on what type of food they eat and the
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way
they consume it.
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, asking and knowing are not
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for us to
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fully
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their
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culture
.
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, working in multinational
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company
does not guarantee that you will be dealing with another race. There are certain
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company
positions that do not require
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dealing with others, like
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colleagues.

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others
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culture
. One of which is by visiting their
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place to experience their
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culture
. By going in someone’s locality, we have the chance to practice their
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culture
and that
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we will
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it
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culture
is another
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way
to gain knowledge of
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other
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cultures
. Norms and
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ways
of life are
being discussed
and it is a helpful source of information.

Though working in a multicultural
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provides you a glimpse of someone's
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, I don’t
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this is the best
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to
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others
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. There are better
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to do it like visiting places and reading books.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The best way to understand other culture is to work for a multinational company or organization. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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