Crime is a social phenomena which is extremely dangerous and many countries struggle with it. There are two opposite perspectives for reducing the crime rate and dealing with criminals. Some people argue that giving longer prison sentences helps to decrease the crime rate. However, others suggest that many alternative methods will be effective in dipping the crime rate. From my point of view, the second view is the best for dealing with this problem. So I will discuss those views and share with you many verdicts which emphasize my opinion.
On the one hand, many people believe in the strict punishment such as giving longer prison sentences makes criminals afraid of repeating their crimes again. As well as, no body will dare to do any violent acts. For example, the Egyptian government has launched a law which stipulates that twenty- five years sentence for a killer. Actually, after this law, the murders got lower than before. Although, this way can reduce the crime rate but there are other ways which make people do not need to do any crime.
On the other hand, regarding the second view, we will reveal the alternative ways. Firstly, providing people with a good education. Undoubtedly well- educated people have high levels of awareness and culture. Secondly, giving people equal opportunities in their social life because that helps people do not feel oppressed. Thirdly, not allowing for any one having a gun is considered a powerful way. Government has to permit it after doing a test for people and following strict procedures. For instance, Japanese shooting rate got the lowest in all over the world because they made having a gun more restricted.
In conclusion, using alternative modern ways will be better not only for decreasing the number of crimes but also for prohibiting people to do that.
Crime
is a social
phenomena
which is
extremely
dangerous
and
many
countries struggle with it. There are two opposite perspectives for reducing the
crime
rate
and dealing with criminals.
Some
people
argue that giving longer prison sentences
helps
to decrease the
crime
rate
.
However
, others suggest that
many
alternative methods will be effective in dipping the
crime
rate
. From my point of
view
, the second
view
is the best for dealing with this problem.
So
I will discuss those
views
and share with you
many
verdicts which emphasize my opinion.
On the one hand,
many
people
believe in the strict punishment such as giving longer prison sentences
makes
criminals afraid of repeating their
crimes
again.
As well
as,
no body
will dare to do any violent acts.
For example
, the Egyptian
government
has launched a law which stipulates that twenty- five years sentence for a killer. Actually, after this law, the murders
got
lower than
before
. Although, this
way
can
reduce
the
crime
rate
but
there are other
ways
which
make
people
do not need to do any crime.
On the other hand
, regarding the second
view
, we will reveal the alternative
ways
.
Firstly
, providing
people
with a
good
education.
Undoubtedly
well- educated
people
have high levels of awareness and culture.
Secondly
, giving
people
equal opportunities in their social life
because
that
helps
people
do not feel oppressed.
Thirdly
, not allowing for any one having a gun
is considered
a powerful
way
.
Government
has to
permit it after doing a
test
for
people
and following strict procedures.
For instance
, Japanese shooting
rate
got
the lowest in all over the world
because
they made having a gun more restricted.
In conclusion
, using alternative modern
ways
will be better not
only
for decreasing the number of
crimes
but
also
for prohibiting
people
to do that.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes