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The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. v. 2
That the solutions should be implemented to decrease traffic jam has controversial. It is believed that the most effective measure to tackle this problem is to supply free public vehicle all the time. I partly agree with view because this method has pros and cons. To begin with, it is undeniable that offering free public transport bring some advantages. First and foremost, this solution will decrease the number of vehicles on the road. Due to the fact that public transport such as buses or trains have more seats than private vehicles, the total of motorbikes or private cars which are the primary reason of traffic jam will decline significantly. Moreover, that government offer public means residents can save the huge amount of money for other hobbies. For example, they can spend more money on purchasing some interesting books or solving the personal problems instead of spending them for fuels, fare or maintenance of private vehicle. Nevertheless, providing free public transport in 24 hours every day has some negative impacts on the national economy. The government will face with the financial problems because of limited budget. For instance, when the government spend much money on public transport, it is clearly seen that the shortage of fund for other fields like education, health or technical will occur. It is important to balance the budget for development of country. Besides, traffic congestion is caused not only by the vast number of private vehicles but also the road systems. In addition, in emergency circumstances, people still chose the private vehicles because of being convenient. In conclusion, although there are some benefits of this measure, I assume that providing free public transport all the days and all the hours is not the best solution to reduce traffic congestion. In the long term, investments on facilities and road systems should be carried out along to offering public transport.
That the solutions should
be implemented
to decrease
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traffic
jam has controversial. It
is believed
that the most effective measure to tackle this problem is to supply
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free
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public
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vehicle
all the time. I partly
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agree
with view
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because
this method has pros and cons.

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that offering
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free
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public
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transport
bring
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some
advantages.
First
and foremost, this solution will decrease the number of
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vehicles
on the road. Due to the fact that
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public
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transport
such as buses or trains have more seats than
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private
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vehicles
, the total of motorbikes or
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private
cars which are the primary reason of
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traffic
jam will decline
significantly
.
Moreover
, that
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government
offer
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public
means residents can save the huge amount of money for other hobbies.
For example
, they can spend more money on purchasing
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some
interesting books or solving the personal problems
instead
of spending them for fuels, fare or maintenance of
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private
vehicle.

Nevertheless
, providing
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free
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public
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transport
in 24 hours every day has
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some
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negative
impacts on the national economy. The
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government
will face with the financial problems
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because
of limited budget.
For instance
, when the
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government
spend much money on
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public
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transport
, it is
clearly
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seen
that the shortage of fund for other fields like education, health or technical will occur. It is
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important
to balance the budget for development of country.
Besides
,
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traffic
congestion
is caused
not
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only
by the vast number of
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private
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vehicles
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but
also
the road systems.
In addition
, in emergency circumstances,
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people
still
chose the
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private
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vehicles
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because
of being convenient.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
benefits of this measure, I assume that providing
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free
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public
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transport
all the days and all the hours is not the best solution to
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reduce
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traffic
congestion.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the long term, investments on facilities and road systems should
be carried
out along to offering
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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