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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is to provide free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is to provide free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. v. 1
It is sometimes argued that free and available public transportation services operating in twenty four hours a day is considered as one of the most effective ways to alleviate the increasing road congestion today. While I accept that this approach is good in some ways, I believe there are equally effective measures to solve this problem. I believe it is a good idea for governments to provide public transport free of charge. Firstly, this act might greatly produce a real opportunity for citizens to use free public transportation whenever they need, which will be able to limit the levels of noise and exhaust fumes caused by private vehicles. Therefore, it seem to positively make a meaningful contribution to decreasing many negative impacts causing global warming and the greenhouse effect. Secondly, mass transit seem to be capable of accommodating a huge number of passengers commuting at the same time of day, which might greatly help the government to reduce thousands of people moving on rush hours. For example, the Japanese government has invested an amount of money devoted to improving infrastructure and public service in recent years for the purpose of producing a real chance for citizens to travel freely and experience a strong sense of satisfaction of travelling. However, I would argue that there are equally effective methods of dealing with congested traffic. The first reason is to put more intense concentration on the construction of road with the aim of making transport network smoother and speedier. By stimulating the development of road infrastructure including freeway and highway overpasses, the authorities will be able to minimize the decreasing congestion in transportation during rush hour. Another solution is to effectively impose flexible time frames upon students and employess with the intention of inhibiting a large number of those people spilling on the road at the same time. For example, in Thailand, many schools have a tendency to set a flexible class schedule for students to leave school earlier than white-collar workers, so those schools will directly contribute to contending with a huge number of people moving during peak hour. In conclusion, I believe apart from making public transit available, there are equally effective ways to make sure that the government could deal with traffic congestion effectively
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sometimes
argued that free and available
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public
transportation services operating in
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twenty four
hours a day
is considered
as one of the most
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effective
ways to alleviate the increasing
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road
congestion
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today
. While I accept that this approach is
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good
in
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some
ways, I believe there are
equally
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effective
measures to solve this problem.

I believe it is a
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good
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idea
for
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governments
to provide
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public
transport free of charge.
Firstly
, this act might
greatly
produce a real opportunity for citizens to
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use
free
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public
transportation whenever they need, which will be able to limit the levels of noise and exhaust fumes caused by private vehicles.
Therefore
, it
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seem
to
positively
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make
a meaningful contribution to decreasing
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many
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negative
impacts causing global warming and the greenhouse effect.
Secondly
, mass transit seem to be capable of accommodating a huge number of passengers commuting at the same time of day, which might
greatly
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help
the
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government
to
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reduce
thousands of
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people
moving on rush hours.
For example
, the Japanese
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government
has invested an amount of money devoted to improving infrastructure and
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public
service in recent years for the purpose of producing a real chance for citizens to travel
freely
and experience a strong sense of satisfaction of travelling.

However
, I would argue that there are
equally
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
effective
methods of dealing with congested traffic. The
first
reason is to put more intense concentration on the construction of
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road
with the aim of making transport network smoother and speedier. By stimulating the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
infrastructure including freeway and highway overpasses, the authorities will be able to minimize the decreasing congestion in transportation during rush hour. Another solution is to
effectively
impose flexible time frames upon students and
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employess
with the intention of inhibiting
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a large number of
those
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people
spilling on the
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road
at the same time.
For example
, in Thailand,
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many
schools have a tendency to set a flexible
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class
schedule for students to
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leave
school earlier than white-collar workers,
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so
those schools will
directly
contribute to contending with a huge number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
moving during peak hour.

In conclusion
, I believe apart from making
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public
transit available, there are
equally
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effective
ways to
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make
sure that the
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government
could deal with traffic congestion
effectively
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is to provide free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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