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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. v. 1
Recently, traffic jams have been increasingly popularity in major cities which cause negatively impact for a commuter. In order to tackle this issue, some people argue that government should provide free transit all the day. Although supply free public transport would deal with traffic jams, I am of the opinion that this issue action would do more harm than good. On the one hand, providing free transportation all day long is not necessary and leaves a burden on national budgets. According to the majority report, traffic jams mainly occur in rush hour, so it is pointless to provide public transport all the time. Moreover, in the long term, this measure may be unachievable due to its tremendous cost, and it not only costs government but also unable to address the root of the issue. It will be far more economical if this amount of money is invested in enhancing road facilities. On the other hand, there are many other solutions that have proven more effective in mitigating. Notable among them is the construction and improvement of transport systems such as roads or railway systems. This action will help commuters who live far from workplace save their time to drive. In addition, governments should implement policies that encourage companies to move to rural areas instead of concentrating on urban areas. This can reduce traffic flow and promise equal development between different regions in a country. In conclusion, while provided public transport all day long may seem like a good idea, I believe that the negative effects of this action would be far greater than any of its possible advantages
Recently,
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traffic
jams have been
increasingly
popularity in major cities which cause
negatively
impact for a commuter. In order to tackle this issue,
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some
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people
argue that
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government
should provide free transit all the day. Although supply free public
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transport
would deal with
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traffic
jams, I am of the opinion that this issue action would do more harm than
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good
.

On the one hand, providing free transportation all day long is not necessary and
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leaves
a burden on national budgets. According to the majority report,
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traffic
jams
mainly
occur in rush hour,
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so
it is pointless to provide public
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transport
all the time.
Moreover
, in the long term, this measure may be unachievable due to its tremendous cost, and it not
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only
costs
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government
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but
also
unable to address the root of the issue. It will be far more economical if this amount of money
is invested
in enhancing road facilities.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
other solutions that have proven more effective in mitigating. Notable among them is the construction and improvement of
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transport
systems such as roads or railway systems. This action will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
commuters who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
far from workplace save their time to drive.
In addition
,
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governments
should implement policies that encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to rural areas
instead
of concentrating on urban areas. This can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
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traffic
flow and promise equal development between
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
regions in a country.

In conclusion
, while provided public
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transport
all day long may seem like a
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good
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idea
, I believe that the
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negative
effects of this action would be far greater than any of its possible advantages
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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