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The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. v. 1
It is often thought that every nation should offer the latest medical facilities to its citizens, irrespective of expenses and availability. I completely agree with this notion, not only because it is the fundamental right of citizens and they pay taxes throughout their lives, but also because it will result in a greater number of sufferings. This essay will explore how these factors justify my opinion. Firstly, the factor that compelled me to agree with this statement is people pay taxes, for every facility, to the government. The government has fixed a specific percentage on everything that has to be paid by its residents, which they claim to spend for the betterment of the citizens. Take an example of Brazil, where it is estimated that a person’s tax return is five thousand dollars per year, which is spent by the government to provide state-of-the-art facilities to its citizens. Thus, it is justified to spend the money on the provision of expensive health services to a person, which is collected from him. Secondly, enjoying a free medical treatment, whether it is unavailable due to its cost, is the basic right of a person. As the government is responsible for the basic necessities of its people such as health, food, shelter, so as per the state's policy getting free health care is included in basic rights. For instance, states assume the obligations and duties under the International Law, to respect, to protect, and provide all fundamental rights. Hence, despite the cost, nations should provide free health services to their people. Finally, if treatments were not available, then it would result in higher morbidity and mortality rate in the country. As some segments of society such as unemployed, retired persons and poor people are unable to get medical services due to higher cost, due to which the death rate will increase. To sum up, I believe that I completely agree with the statement not only because of the levy imposed by the government on citizens and providing free of cost health facilities is the government’s obligation.
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that every nation should offer the latest medical facilities to its
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citizens
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agree
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citizens and
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lives
,
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it will result in a greater number of sufferings. This essay will explore how these factors justify my opinion.

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, the factor that compelled me to
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agree
with this statement is
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people
pay taxes, for every facility, to the
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government
. The
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government
has
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fixed
a specific percentage on everything that
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has to
be paid
by its residents, which they claim to spend for the betterment of the
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citizens
. Take an example of Brazil, where it
is estimated
that a
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person’s
tax return is five thousand dollars per year, which
is spent
by the
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government
to provide state-of-the-art facilities to its
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citizens
.
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, it
is justified
to spend the money on the provision of expensive
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health
services to a
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person
, which
is collected
from him.

Secondly
, enjoying a
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free
medical treatment, whether it is unavailable due to its
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cost
, is the basic
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right
of a
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person
. As the
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government
is responsible for the
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basic necessities
of its
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people
such as
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health
, food, shelter,
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so
as per the state's policy getting
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free
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health
care
is included
in basic
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rights
.
For instance
, states assume the obligations and duties under the International Law, to respect, to protect, and provide all fundamental
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rights
.
Hence
, despite the
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cost
, nations should provide
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free
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health
services to their
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people
.

Finally
, if treatments were not available, then it would result in higher morbidity and mortality rate in the country. As
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some
segments of society such as unemployed, retired
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persons
and poor
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people
are unable to
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get
medical services due to higher
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cost
, due to which the death rate will increase.

To sum up, I believe that I completely
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agree
with the statement not
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only
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because
of the levy imposed by the
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government
on
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citizens
and providing
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free
of
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cost
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health
facilities is the
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government’s
obligation.
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IELTS essay The best way to solve traffic congestion is to provide free publictransport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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