Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 6
Nowadays, the world is at a great risk with proliferation of environmental pollution. Some people are considering that increment of fuel cost will reduce these environmental issues. I agreed with this statement up to a certain extent, however, there are many other ways to deal with this issue instead of looking at only one aspect of the problem. Following essay will discuss both sides of it in detail. To begin with, currently number of vehicles are rapidly growing, this situation can be controlled by increasing gas prices. People will be more cautious of usage their vehicles due to the high costs, hence it will help greatly to decline the air pollution as well as the heavy traffic congestions. For instance, people will start to walk or use public transportation methods to travel short distances instead of spending a fortune on fuel. On the other hand, there are plenty of other methods to maintain quality of the environment. Firstly, relevant authorities should take necessary actions to improve infrastructure and public transportation, such as developing better roads, improve timetables of buses and trains to operate on time so people will encourage to use them than their own vehicles. Secondly, impose high taxes for personal vehicles. For example, people in Singapore hardly can own their own vehicle due to very high taxes, but their public transportation standards are in good condition so no one is complaining about not owning a vehicle. In conclusion, environmental issues can be controlled up to a certain limit by increasing cost of fuel. Therefore, it's necessary that the authorities should take initiatives of action latter mentioned so overall it will help to overcome these problems.
Nowadays, the world is at a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
with proliferation of environmental pollution.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are considering that increment of fuel cost will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
these environmental issues. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
with this statement up to a certain extent,
however
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other ways to deal with this issue
instead
of looking at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one aspect of the problem. Following essay will discuss both sides of it in detail.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
currently
number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
are
rapidly
growing, this situation can
be controlled
by increasing gas prices.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
will be more cautious of usage their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
due to the high costs,
hence
it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
greatly
to decline the air pollution
as well
as the heavy traffic congestions.
For instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to walk or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transportation methods to travel short distances
instead
of spending a fortune on fuel.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of other methods to maintain quality of the environment.
Firstly
, relevant authorities should take necessary actions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
infrastructure and public transportation, such as developing better roads,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
timetables of buses and trains
Did you mean "operating"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to operate
on time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will encourage to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them than their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
.
Secondly
, impose high taxes for personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in Singapore hardly can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicle
due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high taxes,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
their public transportation standards are in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
condition
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
no one is complaining about not owning a vehicle.

In conclusion
, environmental issues can
be controlled
up to a certain limit by increasing cost of fuel.
Therefore
, it's necessary that the authorities should take initiatives of action latter mentioned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
overall
it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to overcome these problems.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts