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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 3
Some individuals believe that raising the cost of fuel is the most effective method to solving world's environmental problems. While I accept that this policy is good to some extent, I believe it is not the best because there are much better measure to reduce environmental issues. it might be a good idea to increase the price of fuel such as coal, petrol and gas because of some reasons. Firstly, by making it more costly to purchase fuel, government can deter people from using personal vehicles. For example, if gasoline is more expensive, people will start using public transport rather than driving a car or riding a motorbike, resulting in a reduction of CO2 emissions, which is responsible for global warming and climate change. Secondly, the decrease in the demand of fuel as a result of high price would lead to the minimization of natural resources exploitation which reduce the problem of waste disposal in such industries. Lastly, as the cost of using fuel is higher, people might use them much more efficient. For example, if gas prices are higher, Europeans will learn how to cope with the cold and only turn on the heater when necessary. However, I would argue that there are much better methods to deal with environmental problems. The first solution us that government should spend more money on conducting research and developing technology to use renewable energy resources including wind, solar and tidal energy instead of natural resources. By doing this, people can reduce energetic burden on nature. The second solution is to have stricter punishments for environmental criminals. For example, people who has been accused of environmental degradation should be required to pay a huge fine or receive a prison sentence. This makes individuals more likely to respect the law, and environmental issues can be limited. Additionally, the government should launch programs or run advertising campaigns to raise people awareness about conserving nature. In conclusion, I believe apart from increasing the price of fuel, there are more effective ways to protect the environment.
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individuals believe that raising the cost of
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fuel
is the most effective method to solving world's
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environmental
problems. While I accept that this policy is
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good
to
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some
extent, I believe it is not the best
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because
there are much better measure to
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reduce
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environmental
issues.

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it
might be a
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good
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idea
to increase the
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price
of
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fuel
such as coal, petrol and gas
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because
of
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some
reasons.
Firstly
, by making it more costly to
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purchase
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fuel
,
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government
can deter
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people
from using personal vehicles.
For example
, if gasoline is more expensive,
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people
will
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start
using public transport
rather
than driving a car or riding a motorbike, resulting in a reduction of CO2 emissions, which is responsible for global warming and climate
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change
.
Secondly
, the decrease in the demand of
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fuel
as a result
of high
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price
would lead to the minimization of natural resources exploitation which
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reduce
the problem of waste disposal in such industries.
Lastly
, as the cost of using
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fuel
is higher,
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people
might
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use
them much more efficient.
For example
, if gas
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prices
are higher, Europeans will learn how to cope with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
and
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only
turn on the heater when necessary.

However
, I would argue that there are much better methods to deal with
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environmental
problems. The
first
solution us that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should spend more money on conducting research and developing technology to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
renewable energy resources including wind, solar and tidal energy
instead
of natural resources. By doing this,
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
energetic burden on nature. The second solution is to have stricter punishments for
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environmental
criminals.
For example
,
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people
who
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has
been accused
of
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environmental
degradation should
be required
to pay a huge fine or receive a prison sentence. This
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makes
individuals more likely to respect the law, and
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environmental
issues can
be limited
.
Additionally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should launch programs or run advertising campaigns to raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
awareness about conserving nature.

In conclusion
, I believe apart from increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
, there are more effective ways to protect the environment.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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